Talk:Protopolybia chartergoides
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Peer Edits
[edit]Your article was pretty good but each section that you included is a bit short. I think a bit of expansion in the Distribution and habitat and the Camouflage sections could be beneficial to the quality of your article. I am not sure what you mean by the “best camouflage is absent within this species.” You should expand upon this. Why are the nests transparent while the combs are not? In the Distribution and Habitat section, you should talk more about the nests and where they are usually built in the environment. Are they found in caves, on tree branches, or on buildings? I also think you should expand your descriptive overview to include some specific information on your species. What is special about your species? This is what you should include in the descriptive overview. Overall, your article is good but you need to include more species-specific information. I thought your best section was Taxonomy and Phylogeny, because it is species-specific and lists similar species to yours. A lot of this information can also be applied to other wasp species. If possible, you should also link to more articles and also add a photo if you can find one! Probertsg (talk) 20:44, 21 October 2014 (UTC)
Peer Edit
[edit]I took the liberty of adding a few hyperlinks for foraging and sawflies but you did a good job of already having many words linked to different articles. I liked reading through your article and found it very informative. You could add a little more information about the geographic locations of the wasps. Other than that this is a good article and other than the suggestions above I cannot find much else to say. Good work! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cnemelue (talk • contribs) 22:16, 23 October 2014 (UTC)
Suggestions to make it a Great Article
[edit]I think you should add more information in the introduction to draw the reader in. Give a description of something cool or unique to this species. Whether that is its camouflage nest or predatory skills, adding this detail will give the page more allure and personality. I tried looking for pictures of the species, but it was hard to find any, let alone with a commons license. Since there are no pictures for you to include in your article, I think it'd be very helpful if you took more time to describe, in detail, the appearance, color, size, etc. of the wasps and how the castes differ in their appearance. I rephrased and corrected misspellings under colony cycle. There was a redundant sentence, so I edited that as well. In the Division of Labor category, it would be great if you could give concrete examples and descriptions of what "physical dominance and food solicitation" looks like for the species. The more specific and visual details about their behavior, the better! In addition, the camouflage nest is really interesting; give the reader more information! Why is it camouflaged? What are the benefits and costs of this appearance? Is it hard to make? Do other wasp species exhibit this kind of nest? I rephrased a sentence in Agriculture, and it would be great if you added more information about their benefits to humans. I linked more words in your article to make it more accessible and connected on wikipedia.
Chiararosenbaum (talk) 04:02, 20 November 2014 (UTC)Chiara Rosenbaum
Peer Review
[edit]The article is very well organized and is full of broad coverage on the topic. There were a few instances of awkward phrasing and syntax issues, but those were easily solved with rearrangements of words. Other than that, I regulated the linking words and tried to limit the use of active voice while maximizing use of passive voice. Overall, the article is free from spelling errors and the headings go from broad to narrow in terms of sequence. VGurusamy (talk) 02:03, 21 November 2014 (UTC)
Suggestions
[edit]This entry is a good starting point on this species. While many different topics are covered, I found that most sections were very brief and could have been expanded a great deal more. Overall, a lot of the information makes sense sequentially and with some editing could lead to a great article. Allykunze (talk) Allykunze (talk) 19:55, 10 September 2015 (UTC)