Talk:Q27 (New York City bus)/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 18:10, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Opening statement
[edit]Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use 
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Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 18:10, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
- To note, I am aware that the nominator, Kew Gardens, is on holiday, so again I ping our friend Epicgenius (talk · contribs) to help out. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 18:19, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Prose
[edit]line in Queens, New York City, United States,
"United States" feels out of place here.
Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
via that street [...] along that street
Obliterate.- Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Service on the route that became the Q27 service
Delete the second "service"- Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Service on the route that became the Q27 started in October 1928 by the Z & M Coach Corporation
This should be "was started".- Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
[...] as part of Zone B (Flushing and Northern Queens).
Expand on this; elaborate on the division of NYC into these zones.- Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
New York City granted
While technically correct, this makes it sounds like the whole city was in on the granting.- Done by @Epicgenius:--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
its former routes being turned over to city operation
and its former routes were turned over to city operation.that New York City Transit
Replace with "the NYCTA"- After 1994, it become publicly known as New York City Transit.--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 22:24, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
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