Talk:Régiment Royal-Louis

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:03, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead is a little brief, could double it up.
• "the South of France" Southern France.
• "and unhuman behaviour" no need to link, and this has tone issues.
• " Insurrection of 31 May–2 June." spaced en-dash.
• "lead to country" led to
• "important Naval Base in" why in caps?
• "the Allies" who?
• "name of King Louis XVII. The" overlinked.
• "French drills and said disciplinary system" link drill and not sure what the "said" disciplinary system was.
• "C. T. Atkinson describes" who is/was he?
• "as "...the" per MOS, a non-breaking space after the ellipsis here.
• "on 1 October" non-breaking space between day and month, on my screen the sentence breaks after the "1".
• "anti-republican" capital R for consistency here?
• "under Royal Navy Captain George Elphinstone." sea of blue (three consecutive links).
• "The counterattack was" link this first time, and be consistent with hyphenation.
• "de Boisgelin had" when starting a sentence, it's usual to go with De...
• "Corsica and Disbandment" disbandment without the capital D.
• "ships Pompée and Puissant, which" + "HMS Terrible" ship names are italicised.
• "which lead to" led
• "in London, Great Britain" no need to link London.
• And we'd normally place it in England.
• "Elliot, 4th Baronet tried" comma after Baronet.
• "Hampshire about" comma after Hampshire.
• "of a White coat" white
• Ref 6 SHOUTING
• Ref 7 needs spaced en-dash, not hyphen.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:20, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man completed, check my sandbox for my comment. J-Man11 (talk) 02:22, 26 September 2021 (UTC)

Please keep review comments/responses on this page. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:13, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

• Lead is a little brief, could double it up.
• "the South of France" Southern France.
• "and unhuman behaviour" no need to link, and this has tone issues.
• " Insurrection of 31 May–2 June." spaced en-dash.
• "lead to country" led to
• "important Naval Base in" why in caps?
• "the Allies" who?
• "name of King Louis XVII. The" overlinked.
• "French drills and said disciplinary system" link drill and not sure what the "said" disciplinary system was.
• "C. T. Atkinson describes" who is/was he?
• "as "...the" per MOS, a non-breaking space after the ellipsis here.
• "on 1 October" non-breaking space between day and month, on my screen the sentence breaks after the "1".
  • Need further explanation on what needs to be changed?
• "anti-republican" capital R for consistency here?
• "under Royal Navy Captain George Elphinstone." sea of blue (three consecutive links).
• "The counterattack was" link this first time, and be consistent with hyphenation.
• "de Boisgelin had" when starting a sentence, it's usual to go with De...
• "Corsica and Disbandment" disbandment without the capital D.
• "ships Pompée and Puissant, which" + "HMS Terrible" ship names are italicised.
• "which lead to" led
• "in London, Great Britain" no need to link London.
• And we'd normally place it in England.
• "Elliot, 4th Baronet tried" comma after Baronet.
• "Hampshire about" comma after Hampshire.
• "of a White coat" white
• Ref 6 SHOUTING
• Ref 7 needs spaced en-dash, not hyphen.

All completed, check comment please J-Man11 (talk) 12:55, 27 September 2021 (UTC)