Talk:Rozen Maiden/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gabriel Yuji (talk · contribs) 03:47, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

The article is well-written and seems to be able to get GA status. I see no major problems. However, you must to do some corrections, and I will do some suggestions you can apply or not. These are:

• what about to introduce Peach-Pit as group? ex: "Rozen Maiden is a manga series written and illustrated by the manga artist group Peach-Pit"

I will leave it to the linked article since there wasn't a need to refer to them as two separate people.

• italics are missing in several words; e.g. tankōbon, Weekly Young Jump

Probably got them all.

• Jun Sakurada withdraws from the society as an overall or from a specific society?

General society.

• bisque doll must to be linked

Done.

• what about to remove the streaked part "Rozen Maiden has spun off anthology manga and novel stories, art books, and four anime series; the four anime series are titled Rozen Maiden, Rozen Maiden: Träumend, Rozen Maiden: Ouvertüre, and Rozen Maiden: Zurückspulen"? or instead of repeating "the four anime series" put "these being" on its place?

I prefer splitting it up to reduce run on. I believe it is better to have the previous sentence introduce the types of media and the second semi-connected sentence to expand on it.

• the "Jp" notes must to be after the punctuation to maintain the standard of references; for example Saitou must to be on this way: Saitou, instead of this way: Saitou,

Nihongo foot ties very strongly to the word than the sentence so it doesn't have to follow the common inline citation rules.

• "eloping" in this case is the act of pratice the elopement?

Thanks, I didn't realize how precise the sentence structure was.

• Everything is covered by sources; what happens with the last sentence of Souseiseki's description?

Sourced.

• in "She often ends her sentences with na no", "na no" must to have quotation marks

Good point.

• Zurückspulen must to be in italic in "Laplace's Demon"

Done.

• the third picture wouldn't be better placed if it was in the right?

I kept it on the left in case the infobox pushes the picture in higher zooms. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 03:56, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

• Shoujo no Tsukurikata (少女のつくり方, lit. "How to Make a Girl") instead of lit. "How to Make a Girl" (少女のつくり方, Shoujo no Tsukurikata); it's aesthetically unsightly the "lit." in the middle of the sentence

Replaced with Nihongo 3

• the same reason to change lit. "The Rozen Maiden That Should Not Have Existed" (まいてはいけないローゼンメイデン, Maite wa Ikenai Rozen Maiden) for Maite wa Ikenai Rozen Maiden (まいてはいけないローゼンメイデン, lit. "The Rozen Maiden That Should Not Have Existed")

Replaced with Nihongo 3

• "Pony Canyon released the series into six DVDs and a box set" rather than " ony Canyon released into series six DVDs and a box set."

Yes, I missed that mistake.

These are the issues I could find. Soon, I'll take a new look at the article, and I think I can pass it. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:47, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

I have addressed the points. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 02:54, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

The article is now ok to me. I think you did a great job, so I'm glad to pass it. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 04:26, 12 November 2013 (UTC)