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I've removed some of the claims on this page that appeared to be NPOV and unverifiable. These include the claim that Feldhahn has "helped to open ... eyes" and that her most recent books "lead to life change and many fascinating conversations." If these claims are verified they should be reinserted carefully -- I felt as though their tone made the article sound like an advertisement for Feldhahn's writing. GJ (talk) 21:06, 21 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Good work so far, but this entry still reads like the "author bio" portion of a press packet

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GJ has done commendable work on this entry. Unfortunately, it still reads like a PR handout for an author tour. That's no reflection on GJ. Normal editing procedures won't fix this kind of writing. Even if you cut out demonstrably non-neutral sentences, the prose itself remains non-neutral down to its bones. IMO, this thing needs a top-to-bottom rewrite in sober encyclopedic style. 67.244.76.130 (talk) 17:32, 2 June 2011 (UTC)TNH[reply]