Talk:Snatcher (video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: TheJoebro64 (talk · contribs) 19:59, 12 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The fact you've been waiting since October has been bothering me. JOEBRO64 19:59, 12 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lede[edit]

  • Snatcher is set in the future in an East Asian metropolis... Simplify: Snatcher is set in a future East Asian metropolis...
    • Done
  • Gameplay is primarily through a menu-based interface... IMO this reads a bit awkwardly, I'd replace "is" with "takes place"
    • Done
  • Link to open world
    • Done
  • ... so the setting and story are heavily influenced by science fiction cinema... I'd replace "cinema" with "films" to avoid repetition
    • Done
  • Link to video game remake when you mention SD Snatcher. I'd also mention that it was released in 1990
    • Done
  • Copyedit: "...for its cinematic presentation and mature themes which were uncommon in video games at the time
    • Done
  • Overall a good summary of the article. JOEBRO64 16:51, 16 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Gameplay[edit]

  • Uncapitalize "move", "look", and "investigate" per MOS:CAPS
    • Done
  • Link to open world and action game in the second paragraph.
    • Done
  • Copyedit: "The Sega CD version supports the Justifier light gun that was packaged with Lethal Enforcers for these segments." JOEBRO64 14:43, 17 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done

Plot[edit]

  • Is "JUNKER" an acronym?
    • Yes, added
  • ...only to find Gibson massacred by a pair of Snatchers. Simplify to "only to find a pair of Snatchers have killed him."
    • Done
  • You refer to Gibson by his last name, but everyone else by their first names
    • Replaced with first name
  • ...investigation.They learn... Add a space after the period
    • Done
  • ...kills the Chief and speak to Harry briefly... Fix "speak" to "speaks"
    • Done
  • I'd add a citation to the note. I know it's discussed later in the article, but without one it's technically WP:OR because it's based on your interpretation of the work.
    • Done
  • Does Kremlin need quotation marks?
    • I think so because we are not talking about the real Kremlin

Development and release[edit]

  • "...but were already over the allowed development schedule so were forced to abandon it and end the game on a cliffhanger."
    • Done
  • Memory limitation issues... WP:EUPHEMISM
    • I think I fixed it
  • Normally, MSX2 games were cheaper at retail than their PC-8801 counterparts, but the expansion cartridge increased the MSX2 version's price. Is there a way you could rewrite this to avoid repeating "MSX2"?
    • Done although it might still sound funny
  • Link to porting at "...so it was chosen to host Snatcher's console port."
    • Done
  • ...and reportedly sold very well for a PC Engine game. "Substitute 'damn' every time you're inclined to write 'very'; your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be." – Mark Twain
    • Done
  • After releasing their first game... "Their" should be "its". Konami is a thing, not a person. This applies to other instances as well.
    • Done
  • There are also a few instances of the same refs being repeated (e.g. the first paragraph has three refs but they're all the same). See Wikipedia:Citation overkill#Needless repetition
    • Done, although I will say other GA reviewers have told me there should be footnote after every standalone idea. So if I say "Mary wore a red hat. Joe ran in the mud." Both sentences should have a footnote even if supported by the same source. I don't know which form is better, but maybe there's a happy middle.
  • The translation took about 2–3 months. Revise the latter part to "two to three" JOEBRO64 12:13, 22 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done

Reception[edit]

  • Link to cult following in the first sentence
    • Done
  • "It The game was still listed on their its 'Reader's Best 20' list two years after release."
    • Done
  • The Sega Saturn version, released several years later, was found to be a faithful port of the PC Engine version by Sega Saturn Magazine. Change from passive to active: "Sega Saturn Magazine found the Sega Saturn version a faithful port of the PC Engine version."
    • Done
  • ...felt the game's juvenile... Change "the game's" to "its" to avoid repeating "the game's"
    • Done
  • Any reason why Next Generation didn't like the voice acting?
    • Done
  • They criticized the music however... → "However, its reviewer(s) criticized the music, ..."
    • Done
  • Italicize and link to Kotaku
    • Done
  • They felt the game... See my previous comments JOEBRO64 17:30, 24 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done

Legacy[edit]

  • Add a comma in between "games" and "including" at "... Kojima games including jealousy, deception..."
    • Done
  • Unlink cult following, since it should be linked in the reception section
    • Done
  • I think it's worth mentioning that Kojima doesn't work for Konami anymore when you mention he doesn't own the rights to the game
    • Done
  • ... especially since it would play well on a Nintendo DS or 3DS... This should be reworded because it sounds like you're stating it as a fact rather than a subjective opinion
    • Done
  • Based on the language, am I correct in assuming the Dreamcast port was canceled? If so, is there a source for this?
    • Well, I'm not sure it was canceled, but there have been no news reports since its announcement 4-5 years ago. No official site or anything. All these sources are just "Hey, look what this guy is doing, Snatcher on the Dreamcast!" Most fan projects like this kinda just fade away rather than being outright canceled. I reworded the sentence a bit.
  • Link to video game remake in the SD Snatcher section
    • Done
  • "... similar manner to the CD-ROM versions of Snatcher" JOEBRO64 16:59, 26 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done

References[edit]

  • Ref #5: What makes GameCritics.com a reliable source?
    • Not much. Removed it and any sourced info.
  • Ref #10: The "D" in "destructoid" should be capitalized
    • Done
  • Ref #16: format using the {{Cite Tweet}} template
    • Done
  • Ref #17: What makes "Amusement Factory" a reliable source?
    • Not much. Removed it and any sourced info.
  • Ref #61: Am I correct to assume this is a primary source?
    • I don't know but I replaced it with the Kickstarter page.
  • All archived, so no linkrot concerns JOEBRO64 17:06, 26 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done

Misc.[edit]

  • These aren't necessary, but I recommend filling out the rest of the non-free image rationales and adding ALT text.
    • Done
  • The "SD" stands for "super deformed", referring to the chibi look of the characters. This strikes me as WP:OR/WP:SYNTH because I'm not seeing in the sources that "super deformed" references the chibi look of the characters. JOEBRO64 15:34, 28 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • It's not Snatcher specific but I added a source that shows SD is Japanese slang for Super Deformed and means chibi.

Overall an interesting article, but some prose and referencing issues need to be addressed. I'll pass this once they are. JOEBRO64 15:34, 28 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@TheJoebro64: Thank you so much for the review. I'll get to this soon. TarkusABtalk 15:50, 28 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@TheJoebro64: Finished going through your comments. TarkusABtalk 13:26, 2 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Awesome. Let's pass this sucker. JOEBRO64 15:25, 2 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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