Talk:The Pinball of the Dead/GA1

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 04:30, 1 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I will be picking up the review of this article.  MPJ-DK  04:30, 1 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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  • The tool checks out okay on all external links so that's in order Green tickY
Copyright violation tool
  • Seem to be okay, it hit on quotes etc. but nothing to worry about Green tickY
General review
  • I don't like seeing GAs with just one lead paragraph, I think we should always strive towards the best possible lead and this just feels short
    • I expanded the lead a bit more. GamerPro64 00:58, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Related - honestly the article seems short too, I read through it and then sat there and was like "is that it"? The reception part is longer than the Gameplay and Development section combined, that imbalance is problematic for me, makes it more about what people thought of the game than the actual game itself.
    • Can't find much information on the development of the game. But I did expand the Gameplay section more, separating it in two sections. GamerPro64 18:52, 5 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • The quote by Kasavin needs a direct source listed with it
    • Didn't notice I missed the sourcing. done. GamerPro64 04:22, 3 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • I have been going over your changes. It does help the balance a bit. I will continue my review now.  MPJ-DK  23:12, 7 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Images
  • The two non-free images looks to have appropriate tags and explanations, there really are no "free" versions available and the free image of the Gameboy is appropriate too - No issues.  MPJ-DK  23:14, 7 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • General review
  • "Full motion" should be "full-motion"
  • "increasing the games difficulty" should be "increasing the game's difficulty"
  • In at least one of the articles I read about how many pinball tables were featured in the game, gave it names etc. I think that'd be good information to include under "Gameplay".
  • "on June 18, 2002 and later on July 4, 2002 in Japan." should be "on June 18, 2002, and later on July 4, 2002, in Japan."
  • "spoke positive" sounds better if it's "spoke positively"
  • "the games animation" should be "the game's animation"
  • "compared the game favorable" should be "compared the game favorably"
  • "It received Editor's Choice from GameZone." seems like a fragment, how about rewriting it to "The game was selected as the "Editor's Choice" by GameZone"
  • "called the games graphics" should be "called the game's graphics"
  • "The sound and music to the game was" should be "The sound and music to the game were"
  • "mixed-bag" is not hyphenated.
  • I am not sure what's missing from this sentence "was made engaging and more things to do in it" but it does not real correctly.
    • Changed it to " was made engaging and there were more things to do in it." GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Short, but if some details around the tables etc. I think it's okay lenght wise and just need to address a few gramatical issues.  MPJ-DK  23:24, 7 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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