Talk:Walter Walkinshaw
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[edit]I worked to improve this entry. Does it now look okay? If not, please point out specific problems. Thanks, MaryMaryJP22 (talk) 23:41, 18 December 2014 (UTC)
- @MaryJP22: The tone comes across as overly familiar, celebratory, and promotional, rather than neutral, formal, impersonal, and dispassionate (for instance, referring to the subject as "Walt, the environmentalist" is both editorializing and contradicts MOS:SURNAME: we generally use surname after first mention of name to maintain a formal tone). Please see WP:NPOV and Wikipedia:Writing better articles for more tips and info. Lastly, while you are not required to reveal your identity, if you are personally or professionally connected to Walter or Jean Walkinshaw, please see the Conflict of interest guidelines. --Animalparty! (talk) 06:38, 13 June 2019 (UTC)