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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 20:49, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this on. Eddie891 Talk Work 20:49, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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I've made some minor copyedits myself that I don't think need discussion. feel free to take issue with/discuss any/all of the above or any of my edits.

Thanks for taking a look at this Eddie891 - I've addressed the above. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:29, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Lee Vilenski, The Chicago Tribune describes the High Flight Foundation as "an interdenominational evangelical organization based in Colorado Springs" if that helps [2] Eddie891 Talk Work 21:19, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Verifiability (spot-check &c)
  • There's a discrepancy between the info-box and the article: the former says 13 hours 37 minutes EVA, the latter 13 hours and 34 minutes
  • could add 'Bill Pogue' as a nickname to the infobox
  • "The crew completed 56 experiments, 26 science demonstrations, 15 subsystem detailed objectives, and 13 student investigations during 1,214 revolutions of the Earth" is pretty much the same as what the source says; I don't think it constitutes copyvio as per WP:LIMITED, but is there any way you could rephrase this?
  • "Pogue received a Bachelor of Science degree in education from Oklahoma Baptist University in Shawnee, Oklahoma, in 1951 and a Master of Science degree in mathematics from Oklahoma State University in Stillwater, Oklahoma, in 1960" ditto. How I might change this one would be "Pogue attended Oklahoma Baptist University in Shawnee, Oklahoma, graduating with a Bachelor of Science in 1951. In 1960, he graduated from Oklahoma State University in Stillwater, Oklahoma, with a Master of Science"
  • I don't see 21a sourcing quite everything there?
  • I don't see 9a citing that he was in the 'fifth air force'?
  • 9b says he left the thunderbirds in 1958, and I don't see him joining in 1955, source says 'after the war', but that could technically be any year after the war
  • 9c doesn't seem to mention solo or slot pilot?
  • 9c says he applied to be an astronaut in 1962, but was rejected 'for lack of test pilot experience', could merit a mention
  • 9d says the empire test pilot's school was part of the two year exchange
    • reworded.
  • don't see 'Manned Spacecraft Center' or 'major' in 9e
  • 9f doesn't cite three marriages or birth dates of children
    • I have just removed the names and birth dates of the children. Our BLP policies state we shouldn't name them if they aren't independently notable, same with birth dates. I've added an additional citation for him having three kids (and 4 stepchildren) along with his wives. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 07:56, 4 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lee, unless I'm way off my mark, this article has somewhat of a sourcing issue. Now, as you are an experienced GA contributor, I am assuming that I've made a huge mistake somewhere and I'm not going to do anything rash. Could you please look over these sources and provide some explanation? I'm just curious what's going on, no hard feelings if you have to tell me that I made a huge mistake (or several). Best wishes, and good luck. Eddie891 Talk Work 21:56, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comprehensiveness

I will mostly be using ProQuest and my Syracuse University Library subscription. If you need me to email you any articles, just ask

  • there was a plaque erected to honor him in sand springs [3]
  • NYTimes obit says "A sense of the transcendent side of the experience, at the same time, led him to take part in the first and only outer space “strike,” as he and his fellow crew members later referred to it jokingly. The request for time off seemed to puzzle ground controllers at Cape Canaveral, Fla. In news briefings they described it as a possible sign of depression or medically caused lethargy in the crew, which also included Edward G. Gibson, a physicist, and Lt. Col. Gerald P. Carr, a Marine and the mission commander. Colonel Pogue, an Air Force officer, said neither was the case. He and the others just wanted more time to look out the window and think. The flight had made him “much more inclined toward humanistic feeling toward other people, other crewmen,” he told Science News in 1985. “I try to put myself into the human situation, instead of trying to operate like a machine.” In his 2011 autobiography, “But for the Grace of God,” Colonel Pogue said the tensions between the astronauts and their ground controllers came to a boil about six weeks into the mission. Unable to persuade their supervisors, they decided to stage their job action. It led to a compromise with controllers, which made the mood during the last six weeks of the flight much more pleasant, he wrote, for “studying the Sun, the Earth below, and ourselves.”" given that this 'strike' was in the headline of their obit, I could see a mention merited.
  • commissioned into the air force as a second lieutenant, NTYimes obit again
  • his mission " held the record for the longest spaceflight until 1978, when Soviet cosmonauts spent 140 days on the space station Salyut 6." could use a mention, NYTimes obit again
  • "After retiring from NASA in 1975, he was a consultant to the aircraft manufacturers Martin Marietta (now Lockheed Martin) and Boeing, helping to develop space station technology." NYTimes obit again
  • "He also embarked on the lecture circuit and spoke at more than 500 schools and 100 civic clubs over 40 years" WaPo obit

And that should be it from here. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:29, 4 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I just would like to use this opportunity to say this was a fantastic GA Review. This is (probably clearly) not my most experienced area, but you did a great job working with me and getting the best for the article. Really well done. :) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:37, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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