Template talk:Did you know/Richard Taylor (British Army officer)

Richard Taylor (British Army officer)

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk)

... that after returning from the Crimean War and the Siege of Sebastopol, Richard Taylor took command of Fort George in Scotland (pictured, with 64-pounder rifled muzzle-loading gun)?

Reviewed: Chinese Academy of Fishery Sciences (diff)

Created by Moonraker (talk). Self nom at 13:45, 26 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please add a comment and signature (or just a signature if endorsing) after each aspect you have reviewed:
Hook

Length, format, content rules: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Source: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Interest: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Image suitability, if applicable: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
ALT hooks, if proposed: ... that after returning from the Crimean War and the Siege of Sebastopol, Richard Taylor took command of Fort George (pictured, with 64-pounder rifled muzzle-loading gun) in Scotland?

Article

Length: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Vintage: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sourcing (V, RS, BLP): Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Neutrality: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Plagiarism/close paraphrasing: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Copyvio: Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Obvious faults in prose, structure, formatting:

Comments/discussion: I really like how you included the text from the offline sources into the notes. My only suggestion would be to move the pictured to after Fort George rather than Scotland as I put in ALT1, or even leaving out the portion with the explanation of the gun (kind of puts a lot of focus on the gun in the hook). It is unfortunate that the small image does not pick up the fort as well as the full size image does. Calmer Waters 03:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No problem with that suggestion, I should say it's an improvement. Thanks for the review. Moonraker (talk) 03:16, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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