User talk:Hgaba
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[edit]Hello, Hgaba, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 00:43, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
Your recent edits have introduced some nonstandard formatting. Please use the links above and those provided by your course instructors, and look at other Wikipedia articles, to see how encyclopedia articles here on WP are structured, before changing the formatting this way. Notably, you added or moved photos into the External Links section; they actually belong in the body of the article. Or you can look at what the article looked like before all your changes. If your changes prove too disruptive and you don't promptly fix them yourself, other editors will probably revert you as it takes a lot of time to pick through and fix that many edits; so it's really best if you take care of this. Also make sure that all the JSTOR articles you are adding meet the Reliable Sources criteria. I haven't had a chance to check them all yet, but this is important. WP:IRS is helpful in this area. Thanks. - CorbieV ☊ ☼ 03:35, 18 March 2017 (UTC)
- I will be adding content to this article right away, and will move photos into the body of the article. The article should fit Wikipedia formatting within a few hours. Thank you. Hgaba (talk) 12:25, 18 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review (by Caroline Byrd)
[edit]Nice work! I've summed up my comments in a few paragraphs below.
Minor edits: "The medals show an Indian FIGURE wearing a headdress, draped in a blanket. With his right hand he drops his tomahawk while simultaneously receiving a pipe of peace with his left from a figure of Minerva, symbolizing America."; "On the reverse IS an eagle.."; "...but do represent the established norms of presidential MEDAL distribution."
I saw your article prior to your edits, and it looks like you made a lot of great changes to make it more reader-friendly. Your writing is strong, and you have a nice diversity of sources. I like that you visually describe the medals, using the object as evidence for how the medals symbolic value, which I would say is its most important feature. I also think having an example treaty in your article is helpful for readers to place the medals in historical context. External links to peace medal images is really helpful, as they can vary greatly, and a link to the image page is quick and easy.
You note the 'controversy' of the medals in the overview portion....could you expand on this in another section of the article? This was a colonial European practice that Native American tribes might not have recognized in the same way settlers did - is there information to talk about the divide between Native and European thought? Also, is there any information/research on how peace medals are regarded in today's society? Both of these questions may present challenges in presenting 'unbiased' information, but if possible, it would be interesting to know more.
You add in Native American reactions to the peace medals, how they regarded them and how they were displayed, throughout the article. Is there a way to make this into a separate section, or sub-heading, such as "Native American Response" or "Medal Use"? This could also present an opportunity to touch on the distinctions between Native American treaty practices and European ones - maybe a sentence about how Native Americans formalized treaties based on their tribal structure. I would also consider a sub-heading on "Medal Technique/Making" - you note size distinctions and metal types in the overview.....could you find info on how the images were 'stamped' into the medal?
Overall, I think you did a great job making the information both interesting and easy to digest. Considering breaking apart sections to smaller 'sub-headings' might help with organization, as you cover a lot of information within each portion.
Great job! Cmbyrd (talk) 15:37, 18 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]I think your article looks great so far. Looking at your talk page, it seems you had to make some major changes earlier, but I could not tell from your article. Your writing is clear, and your article's organization makes logical sense. I especially liked the concise article introduction and your descriptions of the medals.
Adding to the comments your other reviewer has made, if there is indeed any more information on the acceptance or controversy of peace medals, I would like to know! Do you know if there was a discrepancy between which tribes accepted or rejected medals? Or did they have different levels of trust in different time periods?
Additionally, I liked your section on where to find peace medals today, but I wonder if there have been any specific exhibitions of peace medals, and if so, whether you can link the exhibition page to the external sources of your article.
Just a few final orthographic comments: You have "Unites States" written twice in the Early Peace Medals section, and I think the governor of Michigan was actually Lewis Cass, not Lewis Case. I'm guessing that was a previous writer's typo, but by correcting it you can link to the article about him!
Hope this helps! Meghankreidy (talk) 02:49, 20 March 2017 (UTC)