User talk:Melaniea
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Hello, Melaniea, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:51, 16 January 2017 (UTC)
Please stop moving pages[edit]
Please do not move pages into the "Wikipedia:" namespace, as it is for pages related to the maintenance and operation of the encyclopedia, not articles. I have reverted your moves, leaving Industrial microbiology back where it was, and your draft in User:Melaniea/sandbox. If you are intending to replace the article with your draft, you may do so by editing, however, right now it reads more like an essay than an encyclopedia article. I would recommend continue to work on it before moving it over. – Train2104 (t • c) 15:30, 20 April 2017 (UTC)
Hi Melaniea. Since you're adding content to an existing article, you want to follow these instructions. But, as Train2014 mentioned, your article needs more work before it goes "live".
Layout and structure are important in a Wikipedia article - it's isn't just what you say, it's how you present the information. Take a look at pages 7-9 in the Editing Wikipedia brochure that I linked here.
You need to present your material in paragraph form, and in sections. Bullet points should only be used sporadically, and they should be used for actual list items. For example, in the "medical applications" section, those bullet points could be subheadings. You also need to ensure that everything has supporting citations. The production of antibiotics paragraph, for example, is currently unreferenced. References should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph.
You should also pay some attention to tone and style For example, you write
Cheese started to get produced as a way to preserve the nutrients obtained from milk, since milk doesn't have a long shelf-life, turning it into cheese through fermentation can elongate the shelf-life of the product.
Phrasing like "started to get produced" doesn't really belong in formal writing. Although it changes the focus slightly, away from historical origins, something more like this would be better:
Cheese production preserves the nutrients in milk by extending the shelf-life of a perishable product.[reference]
I hope this makes sense. If you have questions, please get in touch. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:18, 20 April 2017 (UTC)