User talk:Sarps95
Hello Sarps 95.
This is an interesting article. You have an interesting one, but I understand you cannot do more research, because there is not a lot of information on this director. But, for what you have, you can expand on your information. Go more into details, explain the sources you have. Great sources, just go into details about them. You may also explain about her death. Since she only has two films and they are hard to find, explain why they are hard to find. Also, explain why they would be hard to find. Her death, may also be interesting. Where did she die or explain her mysterious death. In all, it is a good article, just elaborate on what you have, add more sources if you can.
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Alethea Arnaquq-Baril - Peer Review (Sarper Gokbulut)[edit]
Using tenses: Always use simple past,past continuous and perhaps simple present when writing a wikipedia article. Avoid present continous, present perfect and present perfect continous.
WRONG: 'Anna has produced...'
CORRECT: 'Anna produced...'
Sentence Structure: EX: Her voice is being heard through characters and moving stories. (Again no present continous, and the sentence structure should be strengthened. It does not give me a lot to think about. You are not only appealing to scholars, but other people with different levels of understanding For example, a 12-year old person should be able understand what you mean.)
EX: Her latest film, The Embargo Project (2015), was a film that would make her name be known within the community. Because it is a drama that concentrates on five indigenous women, across Canada, who are challenged to make a film under restrictions tailored to each of these women filmmakers. ( The parts that I made bold should not be included or perhaps they can be re-worded according to the standards of Wikipedia. You can perhaps say;
'Her latest drama film, The Embargo Project (2015), paved the way for the recognition of her career within the community. The story revolves around five indigenous women....'
Her produced film, which was made in 2009, The Experimental Eskimos was another film, which has put Native filmmaking on the map. Because, it really depicts the lives of Natives very well. (Again, weak sentence. I would avoid 'Because..) Perhaps this could be something like;
'She produced another film The Experimental Eskimos in 2009....'
EX: ' It is interesting, because we see how they struggle by not having freedom to do what they wish, still following complicated rules. Also, goes against Native settings.' (Weak sentence, and you have to be neutral. You can't just say; it is interesting! The reader does not pay attention to your opinion. He/she wants to know about the film. By adding your own opinion, that will make them confused.
Citation: EX: 'For her, documentary filmmaking is a powerful tool to communicate with the outside world. And, that is why she had produced and directed these powerful films.' (Could you perhaps cite this? What makes you think that she thinks documentary filmmaking is a powerful tool to communicate with the outside world? You need a strong and reliable source to prove this)
You have correctly created the Table of Contents, however, try to create a table for the filmography section. Make sure you adhere to the appropriate Wikipedia formatting. Especially, when you create separate headings, it should be formatted as 'sub-headings' not just numbered titles that are bold. Also for the reference part, the websites should be correctly cited. And the heading should be changed into 'External Links' instead of 'General References' I would strongly reccomend you to check the instruction manuel that was handed out at the beginning of the class. It tells you exactly how to do it.' I'm assuming you will add the bibliography and references afterwards.Do not make your film titles bold, you can make them clickable if there is another article or articles linked to yours. Even though the page does not exist, you can still add links to them, maybe some other person in the future will consider writing about it, in this way it will be easier for that person to understand whether the page exists on Wikipedia or not. In terms of the clearity and coherence, you need to work on it. Not to say that my article is 100% perfect but you can check it out to get some idea. However, in this article, the flow of information is on a really firm ground. It is well-researched but I would suggest you to check a some scholarly sources maybe one or two rather just a number of external links. Good luck!!!!
Speedy deletion nomination of Wikipedia:Anna Frijters[edit]
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