User talk:Tesla is king

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Post your article[edit]

This is just a reminder to post the article that you are going to work on to the course page. Thanks, Kirwanfan (talk) 15:15, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey Tesla, I reviewed your article today, and it looks really good! I have a couple of grammar changes that I think will make the article read a little smoother, so I posted them below.

  • When discussing glycolosis, it would be great to see a date or year for the major discovery. The article is over the history, so putting in dates is an easy way to tie it back to the timeline of the history.
  • In your instrumental advancements section the first sentence is awkward and uses the word "since" twice. I prefer it as "Biochemistry has advanced dramatically since the mid-20th century with the development of new techniques such as..."
  • I'd like to see a picture in the intro section; it's less intimidating than just a wall of text. maybe a picture of a protein crystalography? or DNA? Even an image portraying the central dogma of biology would be a great addition.
  • Just a little preference thing: I'd like the pictures in the instrumental section to be reversed in order. This way it looks more like 'this is PCR, and this is how we do it' instead of showing the instrument before the actual process.

You've got some great information and sources, and the overall organization is really good. I'm impressed with the article! With one more week of editing it will be ready to turn in I'm positive!

In the intro section: Over the last 40 years, biochemistry has become so successful at explaining living processes that now almost all areas of the life sciences, from botany to medicine, are engaged in biochemical research. Today the main focus of pure biochemistry is in understanding how biological molecules give rise to the processes that occur within living cells which, in turn, relates greatly to the study and understanding of whole organisms.

When you list the components of the major macromolecules in your intro, proper semicolon usage breaks the list up into 4 smaller fragments, adding clarity: For example, a protein is a polymer whose subunits are selected from a set of twenty or more amino acids; carbohydrates are formed from sugars known as monosaccharides, oligosaccharides, and polysaccharides; lipids are formed from fatty acids and glycerols; and nucleic acids are formed from nucleotides. Loured36 (talk) 23:20, 17 November 2013 (UTC)