Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Greta Garbo/archive1

This article is well written, full of citations and pictures, and about a prolific movie star. Ilampsurvivor5 21:07, 21 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment To start with, articles shouldn't have external jumps in the body of the article. All of these need to be converted to in-line citations. I'll convert the first one for you to give you an example of what needs to be done.--Paul 22:14, 21 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Another Comment: Articles that make it through FA ususally do not have "Trivia" sections. Some of the items in your Trivia section are real info (like Ninotchka being #52 in the list of AFI's 100 Years... 100 Laughs & can be incorporated into the main text. Other items, like "A British sherman tank in Call of Duty 2 was named Greta Garbo" are best deleted.--Paul 21:16, 22 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The lead needs work, it should be a summary of the content of the article, see WP:LEAD
Posthumous recognition and trivia ahould be merged together into a legacy section or something similar.
Fair use images need fair use rationales
The writing is generally poor and consists almost entirely of disconnected single ot two sentence paragraphs.
Based on the length of the article and the length of her career and impact in Hollywood, I'm supposing that this article is not comprehensive.
References should be full described and use a consisten system, see WP:CITE
The personal life section is oddly stuck in the middle of a chronological narrative about her career.

Refer to Peer-review. Not ready! Not ready! Not ready! The article has so many problems that I can write pages! Ask for a perr-review and withdraw the nomination.--Yannismarou 15:42, 22 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]