Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Wonder Mountain's Guardian/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 02:28, 17 June 2015 [1].

Wonder Mountain's Guardian

Nominator(s): Dom497 (talk) 02:22, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the Wonder Mountain's Guardian dark ride/roller coaster at the Canada's Wonderland amusement park located in Canada. It was reviewed for GA-status by The Rambling Man and later copy-edited by Baffle gab1978.--Dom497 (talk) 02:22, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose as incomplete. It is a good start, but I see some fundamental issues that need tackling:

The article is not particularly well-written. In some places (like para 3 of History), sentences are choppy with little variety. The Ride experience section is awkwardly written and needs quite a bit of rewriting. It should flow well and be entertaining to read since it is describing a roller-coaster.
The History section is imbalanced toward planning/speculation and too light on actual development. It seems to me that a roller coaster article should have an entire section on the process of designing and building such a major attraction. You have one short paragraph entirely sourced to social media. I think you will need to spend more time researching here, doing library searches and looking into popular journals, trade publications, etc. What were the design challenges? Setbacks? Who designed the physical ride? Using what process and tools? You have Art Engineering in the infobox and lead as the manufacturer, but then they are not even mentioned in the building process.
Similarly, you mention Triotech in the infobox and lead, but they are barely mentioned in the article. Who designed the multimedia aspects, how, and using what software and process? What were the challenges and setbacks? The entire narrative is missing.
You devote a section in Ride experience to Zombies 4D but there are only two sentences covering it in History (both citing primary sources). How was it designed and developed, and by whom?
The Reception sections seems light. More research is needed. What did major coaster groups think of the ride? Reviews? The third para is implying causation between the coaster and attendance, but do the sources actually support that?

I recommend you withdraw the nomination to work on it. --Laser brain (talk) 11:48, 16 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 02:28, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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