Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Green Wing (series 2)/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted 15:43, 23 April 2008.

Green Wing (series 2)

Having successfully promoted Green Wing (series 1) to featured list, I am trying to do the same with the second series. I have followed the same prinicples as I did with the previous list and I believe that this list is now of the same quality. ISD (talk) 11:21, 26 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Sally Phillips has two l's in her surname.
" in the episodes that he appears in" - "in the episodes in which he appears"
"Other than Harley, other Green Wing writers make cameos. These include Fay Rusling and Oriane Messina.[10]" merge... "..make cameos, including..."
"was received less well " clumsy...
"one- off" rogue space.
"who steals some of Mac's semen and makes herself pregent." typo and exactly how did this occur?!
" so he tries to trick her " -who, Guy or Alan?
"while still trying to convince Joanna that he is having it. " reads strangely to me.
"and make her fly" what does this mean?
" takes the tape of Sue" off Sue?
" aSwiss Army Knife" space required.
"of what he thinks is her favourite thing." what was it actually?
" trains station" singular train.

That's it from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:44, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Response to comments - I've carried out the changes you've asked for. ISD (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Can the stubby sentences "The second series was considered worse than the first by critics." and "The second series was considered worse than series one." be expanded?
"Amongst" sounds archaic compared to "Among"
Cathy Prior's review relates only to the first episode, not the series
Add a wikilink to Dada

-- ṃ•α•Ł•ṭ•ʰ•Ə•Щ• @ 17:00, 28 March, 2008

- Response to comments - I have carried the changes that you asked for. ISD (talk) 18:05, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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