Wikipedia:Peer review/Al Gore/archive1

How can this be a better article? Please tell. 11kowrom 18:33, 18 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A few points, mostly focusing on style rather than content:

Subheadings are overused. For example, the "Education" subheading is unneeded as education fits under "early life" without it. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style/(headings). Several subsections should be merged in the Vice president section, and from the Private citizen section onwards. Ideally, the TOC should be half its current size.
On a similar note, one paragraph sections should be avoided where possible.
The article could do with a thorough copyedit, to improve akward sentences such as "Gore switched majors and worked hard in his government courses and graduated from Harvard in June 1969 with a Bachelor of Arts degree in government."
Try to convert bulleted lists to prose as much as possible.
The section on the 2004 election looks disproportionately long, given that he was not a candidate.
The "Internet and the Webbys" section is a mess, and should be continuous prose rather than small chunks of trivia. This section uses a different referencing style to the rest of the article.

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 15:33, 21 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]