Wikipedia:Peer review/Animaniacs/archive1
I've listed this article for peer review because I've got it to Good Article status, and i'm trying to get it to featured status. Basically, I want to know if something's missing, and if something seems inadequate in the article. Thanks, Gak Blimby 23:46, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
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[edit]Well done article. I have only a couple of minor comments:
I don't see a mention of who did the voices for Pinky and the Brain.
- OK, I'll write that in. Gak Blimby 04:12, 23 September 2007 (UTC) -
Done
Did Richard Stone play all the instruments, or use synthesizers to create all the musical tracks? VisitorTalk 16:54, 17 September 2007 (UTC)
- No, Animaniacs had a 40-piece orchestra, with music composed by Richard Stone. It says so in the article. Gak Blimby 04:12, 23 September 2007 (UTC) -
Done