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Avatar: The Last Airbender (season 3)[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.
This article has gone through most of the basic recommendations given for the previous Avatar season articles. Nonetheless, I would still like some general input on the article. Specifically, I would like comments on the lead and overall prose. Other comments are welcome as well. Thanks, — Parent5446 (message email) 22:52, 21 July 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • The article needs a copyedit - ask at WP:PRV for someone to help. Just one example from the lead The season released four DVD volumes, with a complete box set to follow.[1] First off, seasons can not release anything, so perhaps it would be better as something like The season was intially released on four DVDs, with a complete box set planned to be released in September 2008.[1]
  • Give specifics where possible Season three received a similar critical reception to that of the previous seasons. tells me nothing if I do not know the other seasons' critical receptions. Perhaps, As with previous seasons, the critical reception was quite positive.
  • Current ref 9's Avatar Website states the nature of Combustion Man's attacks" should be a link to the website in question
  • I do not write TV articles, but it seems to me that the sources used could be better. Do they meet WP:RS - for example, LiveJournal or DVDTalk? I also note that almost half the sources are either Nickoledeon or Amazon - try for independent third-party sources (Nick and Amazon both want to sell DVDs presumably).
DVDTalk and LiveJournal are used for their reviews, how is someone's opinion unreliable? Blackngold29 02:30, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
As an example, if someone had a blog and wrote on Avatar, that would be someone's opinion, but not a reliable source. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:46, 1 August 2008 (UTC)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:27, 27 July 2008 (UTC)