Wikipedia:Peer review/Belarus/archive3
Belarus[edit]
It has been a while, and the elections of May of 2006 have faded into the annals of time. We had a lot of edits and additions due to the elections, but now since the dust has settled, I just want to see what needs to be done with this article before it gets sent to FAC again. Thanks. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 03:27, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
- It is obvious a lot of work has been done on this. Here are some suggestions.
- The lead paragraphs should summarize the rest of the article and at least mention all the header topics in the article, even if it is just a word or phrase (i.e. are Demographics and Culture mentioned?). It should not have things in it not elsewhere in the article. I would not have two sets of translations of the name - why not just the Republic of Belarus translations? "while the short name is Belarus" is repetitive (how the article starts).
- History of the name: I would translate Ruthenia or otherwise explain why White Russia is not a correct translation. "Historically, the country was referred to in English as "White Russia"....the practice continues to this day in other languages." This is confusing - what other languages (combine this with the sentences on German, Turkish and Greek bleow)? Do you mean other languages use the English phrase "White Russia" or the equivalent in their language? I would be more specific - which languages and what words? I would also use "as of 2006" or other specifics instead of "to this day". Also be more specific than "European James Horsey" - what country was he from? Clarify Litwa and Licwiny - why were they banned? Is it possible to be consistent on Belorussia vs. Byelorussia and just use one consistently after discussing both?
- History: a map here would be helpful to locate the places discussed. Seems to be heavy on most recent events. First, second and fourth paragraphs have no references and will need them for FA.
- Just looking at the rest of the article, needs many more inline references to be FA. See also should be last before references (as it is Neighboring Countries and International rankings come in between). The Neighboring Countries figure is not something I have seen before - I think a word description would be preferred (directions are not given - assume North is top). Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch 04:01, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- PS I just read the failed FAC comments - I would try to address all of those too. Many of the things pointed out in FAC as problems are still in the article. Ruhrfisch 04:08, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- I am going through most of your comments and making the changes. I am a bit confused on why the Neighboring countries thing is there too. I am going to conver that into prose and stick it into the geographic section. I think it is useless too, unless it is something that Wikiprojects Country's trying out. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 04:59, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- I am going to wait on the FAC; the page is being targeted a lot for vandalism and other issues. I need to check up on the numbers too of make sure they are still accurate. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 23:14, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
- I am going through most of your comments and making the changes. I am a bit confused on why the Neighboring countries thing is there too. I am going to conver that into prose and stick it into the geographic section. I think it is useless too, unless it is something that Wikiprojects Country's trying out. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 04:59, 22 November 2006 (UTC)