Wikipedia:Peer review/Chocobo/archive1
Chocobo[edit]
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This article is really terrible, and I have no idea how to get it to GA. Shower me in critiques! :) Judgesurreal777 (talk) 01:07, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: I would not say it is really terrible, just needs a lot of work. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
- A model article is always useful when trying to improve - WikiProjects list their FAs and GAs in their Assessment sections, so I looked and found Pikachu is a video game character GA (not sure, but it looks like there are no such FAs). There are a lot of video game GAs, so I imagine there are other such model articles out there.
- Most of the Final Fantasy articles are FA, so they should have some reliable sources in them to use here.
- While some effort is made to write from an out of universe perspective, be extra careful to do so all of the time. See WP:IN-U
- The lead should be a summary of the whole article and give about the same weight to each topic as the article does - there are 10 sections on Chocobo spin off games, but only one short sentence on them in the lead. See WP:LEAD and WP:WEIGHT
- Make sure to avoid jargon or at least explain it for the uninitiated reader, see WP:JARGON
- For GA this will need many more references. Any direct quote needs a cite, as does any place where information is attributed to someone, as do any sort of statistics and dates, as do any extraordinary claims. As a rule of thumb there should be at least one cite per paragraph - currently many paragraphs and whole sections have no citations. See WP:CITE
- There are at least four sections that are only one sentence long and need to be either expanded or combined with other short sections.
- Internet refs need at least url, title, publisher, author if known, and access date. While many of the refs meet this, several do not. I am also not sure all of the refs used meet WP:RS, I am not a game expert.