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Descendants of Charles II of England[edit]

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I've listed this article for a peer review to find out what I can do to get it to Featured List status, I've exhausted almost all resources on the topic to build the list and feel it should be well on the way to passing. Thanks for any help! - Yorkshirian (talk) 21:29, 29 June 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • The article needs a copyedit - for example, just in the lead missing word here including Augustus FitzRoy, 3rd Duke of Grafton who became Prime Minister of Great Britain, cricket pioneer Charles Lennox, 1st Duke of Richmond, [and] parliamentary reformer Charles Lennox, 3rd Duke of Richmond. Or this is a sentence fragment Though William is part of the royal House of Windsor, rather than the House of Stuart.
  • The lists could use some explanatory text to explain things and put them into context, for example in the "Child by Lucy Walter" section, explain why only the first one is Duke of Monmouth, then only one Duke of Dalkeith, then there are the 2nd through 10th Dukes of Buccleuch, but no first duke. Why?
  • Or in Children by Catherine Pegge where there some text about the daughter, there are no dates for her to put her into context - was she older or younger than her brother?
  • The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself, but although Diana Pincess of Wales is in the lead, she is not in the list(s). I am also not sure what the criteria for inclusion in the lists are.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 13:08, 5 July 2008 (UTC)