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Endometrial cancer

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I've been working on this one for awhile and am looking for a mid-development/pre-GAN review. Any thoughts would be welcome. Thanks, Keilana|^{Parlez ici} 01:11, 27 July 2014 (UTC)

• Well done for tackling this topic, Keilana. Some general advice and pointers. JFW | T@lk 20:40, 31 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I would expand all technical terms (e.g. pyometra) on first use. (The pyometra article is mostly about veterinary medicine, by the way!)
    •  Done
  • I would move lifetime risk from "Risk factors" to "Epidemiology".
    •  Done
  • The "Pathophysiology" section is exclusively about molecular biology but doesn't say a lot about how this leads to proliferation, invasion, metastasis. For the lay leader this may be confusing. I am not sure how much there is to say about the tumour microenvironment, but it might need covering.
    •  Done, I think.
  • The term "evaluate" is rarely used in British English and perhaps an Atlantically neutral term might work better.
    •  Done
  • Would the "classification" section be more effective if it was presented in the form of a table?
    • @Jfdwolff: I'm not sure what you mean by that, but I did write a brief intro paragraph explaining the difference in tumors. What kind of table were you thinking? Keilana|^{Parlez ici} 19:30, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
  • The same applies to the FIGO staging.
    •  Done
  • In the "surgery" section, the reason for performing mastectomy in type II cancers is not explained. Presumably this is prophylactic?
    • Yes it is.  Done
  • In "add on therapy", which tumor marker is associated with endometrial cancer? Is this a reference to Ca125?
    • Yes it is but that information got shuffled elsewhere and makes much more sense now.
  • I would integrate "Complications of treatment" with discussions about the respective treatments.
    •  Done
  • "Treatment of recurrences" is technically palliation rather than cure, and perhaps this should be emphasised.
    •  Done
  • Some of the references are not secondary sources (e.g. much of the "Quality of life" subsection).
    • I think I got them all.

Thank you so very much for this review! It was incredibly helpful. Keilana|^{Parlez ici} 19:30, 10 August 2014 (UTC)