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I Need to Know (Marc Anthony song)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to see if can be improved further for a possible featured article nomination.

Thanks, Erick (talk) 06:58, 8 April 2014 (UTC)

Comments from Tezero[edit]

  • Might go a little too in-depth into the album in general, via Background. I mean, the section has literally one sentence on this song out of three paragraphs.
  • "It fuses the sound of contemporary R&B and incorporates Latin percussion instruments the timbales, congas, and the trumpet" - Mediocre grammar/usage; I'd change it to "It combines the general air of contemporary R&B and the Latin-centric sounds of the timbales, congas, and trumpet".
  • "titled it "Dímelo"" - remove "it"
  • Citation #10 ("Marc Anthony (Media notes). Marc Anthony. Columbia Records. 1999.") needs a page number or other specification.
  • "Barry Walters from Entertainment Weekly gave the song a B+ rating, and said the music "flaunts—rather than disguises—its mambo moves" and called it "radical pop waiting to happen."" - Two "and"s to join three clauses in a sentence isn't good form.
  • "but lost to "Livin' la Vida Loca" by Ricky Martin" - Minor, but this same wording is used two sentences earlier. Could you rephrase it somehow?
  • I don't feel like going in-depth into the sources as I'm not well-acquainted with which are considered reliable for music articles, but nothing major stands out.

Feel free to ask for further clarifications if you'd like them, and I'd appreciate comments at Amy Rose's peer review. Tezero (talk) 03:16, 11 May 2014 (UTC)

@Tezero: I'll see what I can do for your peer review. I can make no promises and it's been a long time since I got involved in a video game-related article. Erick (talk) 23:50, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
Whatever you can give helps. Thanks. Tezero (talk) 00:23, 12 May 2014 (UTC)