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Indus Valley Civilization[edit]

it's a great article, containing most information we have about the indus valley civilization. why not make it a featured one? Jasminek 06:22, 20 February 2006 (UTC)

Sections of this article have an unfavourably high image/text ratio. You should try and address this by either relocating the images or adding more text to those sections. Also note that other sections have no images as yet. - Samsara contrib talk 14:45, 20 February 2006 (UTC)
Lead is too short and should be expanded. No inline citations (other then a hyperlink here and there, which is a no-n according to MoS anyway. As this looks more of a former state article then a history one, it sections needs some tidying up. History should be in one place (at the moment we have 'predecessors/Emergence of civilization' at the top, and 'Decline, collapse and legacy and the bottom', 'Trade' and 'Agriculture' should be merged into economy section, 'Science', 'Arts and culture' and 'Writing or symbol system' should be merged into a culture section (which needs at least a para about religion), and something on politics, government and military should be added for full comprehensivness. Oh, and a word on administrative division would be nice, too. See our former states FAs like Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth or the recent Indo-Greek Kingdom for comaprison.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 17:02, 20 February 2006 (UTC)