Wikipedia:Peer review/Jerry Lawler/archive1
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it has the potential to become a Good Article. I realize that it needs some work, and I'd appreciate feedback on how it can be improved.
Thanks, GaryColemanFan 21:15, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 12:38, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
- Something that is essential for wrestling articles to become Good Articles is for the text to be "out of universe". It has to be 100% clear that wrestling is scripted, and that angles, wins, and loses are planned before hand. Check Shelton Benjamin, Nora Greenwald, Kurt Angle, or any of the other wrestling Good Articles for examples of how to do this. If you need help, let me know. Nikki311 17:15, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
- The second paragraph of the lead, where it says he is the most decorated person in professional wrestling, greatly needs to include references with inline citations to support the facts listed there.
- 1970s - 1990s
- First sentence: As a young adult, Lawler had a job as a disk jockey, which garnered the attention of local wrestling promoter Aubrey Griffith. If there is any way this sentence can be reworked so that "promoter" can be wikilinked (as it is the first time this term is used in the article), that would be good. Right now, "promoter" is next to "Aubrey Griffith" and Wikipedia frowns on two different wikilinked terms being right next to each other causing them to appear as one wikilink. Or actually, since there is no article for Griffith, de-link her name and wikilink "promoter."
- I have never seen or heard of wikipedia frowning on wikilinks that are together. I've always written dates together (ex. June 17 2006); I've also written tag teams together. (Paul London and Brian Kendrick; and I've written match stipulations together too (ex. Hell in a Cell WWE Championship match). Lex94 Talk Contributions Signatures 12:05, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
- Dates are the exception to this rule. Please see Overlinking and Underlinking at The Manual of Style which asks editors to refrain from using two links [that] are next to each other in the text, so that it looks like one link — such as internal links. Thanks, --Naha|(talk) 05:27, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
- I have never seen or heard of wikipedia frowning on wikilinks that are together. I've always written dates together (ex. June 17 2006); I've also written tag teams together. (Paul London and Brian Kendrick; and I've written match stipulations together too (ex. Hell in a Cell WWE Championship match). Lex94 Talk Contributions Signatures 12:05, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
- 4th paragraph - Soon after, Lawler's issues with Verne Gagne led to his departure from the AWA. What issues? This sentence comes out of nowhere, there is nothing before this sentence to indicate he had problems with Gagne and nothing after it either. Please try to add more information about their relationship.
- First sentence: As a young adult, Lawler had a job as a disk jockey, which garnered the attention of local wrestling promoter Aubrey Griffith. If there is any way this sentence can be reworked so that "promoter" can be wikilinked (as it is the first time this term is used in the article), that would be good. Right now, "promoter" is next to "Aubrey Griffith" and Wikipedia frowns on two different wikilinked terms being right next to each other causing them to appear as one wikilink. Or actually, since there is no article for Griffith, de-link her name and wikilink "promoter."
Just a few suggestions :) --Naha|(talk) 16:56, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
- One more thing: Lawler is a cartoonist and has illustrated a few books (and possibly some other things?) His drawings have also been featured in WWE magazine on more than one occassion and have been noted on several RAW broadcasts over the years. If anyone can find some good sources for this information, it would be well worth mentioning as it helps to add some non-wrestling information which broadens the scope of the article. Thanks, --Naha|(talk) 05:31, 29 October 2007 (UTC)