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Katrina Kaif[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has recently failed its GA review. Since the review, I have edited the article to try and fix the main issues (that a lot of the sentences are too long (with too many colons) and that the article comes off as too hagiographic). Anyways, I'd like to get some opinions on the article, so that I can get it to GA, or even FA status.

Thanks :-) AB01 ^{I'M A POTATO} 12:43, 10 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Skr15081997

As far as sources are concerned, the article looks pretty good. I have read the 2 GA reviews.

It needs a little effort to deal with the POV issues. Too many quotes have been used. Either trim them or paraphrase a few.--Skr15081997 (talk) 11:28, 24 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- I've cut a few more quotes here. Tell me what you think. Also, you've asked for the page for one of the sources. If you click on the link and go to the Google Book, there are no page numbers. What should I do about that? AB01 ^{I'M A POTATO} 12:18, 24 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The page number is 2011. Change the link accordingly. The book's title is Mother Maiden Mistress. Is there any particular reason for using "1950-2010" at the end?--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:46, 24 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done AB01 ^{I'M A POTATO} 00:29, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Add that Manish Arora opined that she was the "most sensuous rampwalker" and the source supporting it. I'm new to review process and not in a position to pass judgements on what quotes must stay but this one looks important.--Skr15081997 (talk) 13:03, 24 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, it might be good to leave it out, cos of the POV issue AB01 ^{I'M A POTATO} 00:29, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In 2013, she was Bollywood's highest advance tax paying actress.
- Dubey, Bharti; Pandey, Piyush (20 March 2013). "Akshay Kumar Bollywood's top advance taxpayer". The Times of India. Mumbai: The Times Group. Retrieved 6 November 2014.

This info might be worth adding.--Skr15081997 (talk) 14:21, 6 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that :) But, I've already got that she was the only woman in the Top 10 of India's Forbes list. Both of those lists are talking about their income, so it might be repeating info. AB01 ^{I'M A POTATO} 21:31, 6 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]