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This article was created shortly after the announcement of the game in September 2007. The game is still unreleased, and it is updated as new information is released. Because of a change in Featured topic criteria, this game and the other unreleased games need to go through peer review for the Kingdom Hearts topic to stay featured. The other two games have already been reviewed here and here.

Any comments you may have to improve the article are welcome and I'll try to address them as best I can. (Guyinblack25 talk 22:42, 15 August 2008 (UTC))[reply]

I guess this is just to fulfill FTC requirements now, but I'll take a look anyway:

  • A strange one, but what is the confirmation that "coded" should be in lower case; are you going from the logo alone?
  • Would it be possible to replace "takes place" with "is set"? I just feel that it's technically ambiguous as to having an in-universe meaning or not.
  • Need an idea of gameplay and plot in the lead to differentiate it from previous installments.
  • "Coded will be a puzzle game with action elements mixed into the gameplay" Seems to contradict lead and infobox info. If you feel that it is still predominantly RPG, then tone it down to "will feature puzzle elements" or something similar.
  • "The action gameplay is believed to be similar to the action-RPG style of the previous games in the series and features a similar basic interface" Repetition: "similar" ...."similar".
  • minigame is not hyphenated in the WP article name so probably shouldn't be here for consistency's sake.
  • "The game will feature 3D graphics, with backgrounds in 3D and characters in 2D" Given the proceeding clause, the first becomes somewhat redundant and illogical. If this breaks flow/is too short, consider merging into another sentence.
  • "The initial trailer showcased Sora in dungeons with floating red and black blocks." I don't see why gameplay features have to be attributed to trailers as this is only a representation of what is in the game. Actually, thinking about it, what is the use/meaning of this sentence?
  • I know this hasn't been released yet, but there's a very vague sense of what happens in gameplay and how the puzzle system actually works.
  • Need to wikilink or explain who Sora is. Same for other unexplained terms.
  • I'm wondering why there is three consecutive short sentences at the start of this section.
  • "screen shots" It's one word
  • "Early screen shots showed the game in a wide screen format; based on the idea that more future models will feature a swivel screen". I'm no expert in grammar and punc but I'm not seeing why this semi-colon isn't a comma. Maybe I'm wrong.
  • The refs don't consistently follow a *surname**forename* format.
  • Any chance of finding the full name of Enrico S?
  • Are there better sources for those attributed to Kingdom Hearts Ultimania? What is the status of this site? Same for QJ.net.

Okay, I hope this helps. Ashnard Talk Contribs 11:56, 20 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments, they were very helpful. Here's the progress on them.
  • The image was used as well as an article from GameSpot [1].
  • "Takes place" is now "is set". A very good point on out-of-universe perspective.
  • With the minimal amount of gameplay and story info, I'm not entirely sure what to add. I added one extra sentence about the story.
  • The lead and infobox now say "Puzzle game", however, this may change as more info is released.
  • Repetition toned down.
  • "Mini-game" is now "minigame"
  • Sentence about 3D graphics tweaked
  • I'm not sure what to do about the sentence for now because such little info is know. I'm certain that sentence will be gone, or at least moved to "Development", by the time the game is released.
  • Once again about the gameplay, what's in the article is about all that is known. More should be released down the road.
  • Sora is wikilinked, nothing else stood out to me as needing a link. Are there any others you spotted?
  • Two of the short sentence have been combined.
  • "Screen shot" is now "screenshot"
  • I've switched to a comma, I believe you're right about it.
  • Author names in refs are now consistent.
  • Enrico S. was the only name given in the article.
  • The KHU links are pages with translated interviews from magazines. I expanded one of the KHU refs by citing the magazine article it originated from and linked it as a translation. I'll try to do the same with the other ones, but I'll have to track down the source info first.
    The QJ.net site is owned by a corporation, but I now realize that it is a blog posting that got its info from a forum posting. I've removed the ref and the content associated with it.
I hope that addresses your concerns. Thanks for the comments. If there's anything else please let me know. (Guyinblack25 talk 16:34, 20 August 2008 (UTC))[reply]
I'm thinking of the "Heartless" and "Destiny Islands", but that's about it. I can see how there can be difficulties related to unreleased games when it comes to information, but I'm sure things such as the lead and gameplay will fall into shape once it's released. If you ever want me to give it a lookover before or after release, then just ask. Cheers, Guy. Ashnard Talk Contribs 17:54, 20 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilinks added. Much appreciated. (Guyinblack25 talk 18:50, 20 August 2008 (UTC))[reply]
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