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I’ve listed this article for peer review because I’m hoping to get the article to GA status. I'm wide open to suggestions that will help make sure the article is on the right track. Any feedback regarding grammar, style or content issues would be much appreciated.

Thanks, Gongshow ^⊕ 23:49, 27 August 2009 (UTC)

This article is amazingly well-done. Well referenced, very well written, brilliant and engaging I might add. A very enjoyable read, and it's more than ready for GA status. Only one quibble, on the subject of the Flintstones image. I don't really see how that increases the understanding (see WP:NFCC#8 of the article -- about a song -- so I suggest removing it. Maxim_(talk) 00:55, 4 September 2009 (UTC)

Thanks so much for the kind words and for the suggestion regarding the image. Fair point about contextual significance, it's been removed. Gongshow ^⊕ 04:09, 4 September 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Maxim asked me to look over a few PRs s/he had done, so I read the article. I agree that this looks very good, here are some nitpicky suggestions for improvement.

• I think this needs a ref: R. Stevie Moore recorded a version of the song on his 1983 album, Crises.
• While I agree that it is hard to justify the fair use of File:BeauBrummelstones.jpg in the article as currently written, I think if a bit more were added to the text, the image might be OK to include.
  • I note the article on the Beau Brummels says they used an image of their animated appearance on the Flintstones on the back cover of their second album. I think this could be added to the article (and would strengthen the case for inclusion of this)
  • I also note that the cartoon images of the band seem to match the lineup as noted in the personnel section, so perhaps the caption could identify the musicians in their cartoon form (and would strengthen the case for inclusion of this)
  • I also note that the image shows the band in a very Beatle-esque way - the drummer looks a lot like Ringo, for example. Given the popularity of the Beatles, and all the commnetary of how the band tried to imitate / emulate the Beatles, I also think some commentary on this aspect of the image would help justify fair use.
• If the image is used in the article, the source and copyright need to be beefed up - right now it is just attributed to http://frederatorblogs.com but when I went there I did not see the image. I would try to get a web link that leads directly to a page incorporating this image, and it needs identification that it is from the Flintstones (I would identify the season and episode, as well as Hanna-Barbera Studios as the creator and probable copyright holder).

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog. I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:26, 8 September 2009 (UTC)