Wikipedia:Peer review/List of members of the International Hockey Hall of Fame/archive1

List of members of the International Hockey Hall of Fame

This peer review discussion has been closed.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this to FL status and I have had some editors take a look and help out, but I don't know if more needs to be done or how to go about it and I would like some more in depth critic before I go forward. Basically to steal a line from some one on the Olympics project group I don't want to look like a Muppet during the review process.

Thanks, Leech44 (talk) 21:26, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: I'd like to say something encouraging, but I have doubts that the article can survive as a stand-alone. What would a reader learn from this list that he or she would not learn from List of members of the Hockey Hall of Fame?

• "List of members of the Hockey Hall of Fame" is a featured list and Hockey Hall of Fame is a featured article. Reading quickly, I see that these articles overlap significantly with yours.

• It's possible that you might rescue the article by adding sufficient new information not available in the other two articles. How did the players qualify for nomination? Who chose them? What were the rules? Did any controversies arise about any of the selections? What was the inside of the building like? Who went there? Did they pay to get in? Why was a lager logo on the front of the building? It might be possible to improve this article by digging deeper, finding out all you can about this particular topic.

• The article (including the alt text, which should describe the images but should avoid introducing ideas not conveyed by the images themselves) needs copyediting. I found and fixed several errors near the beginning of the lead, but I see others further down. For example, "permeate" is the wrong word for "permanent", and "leagues" is possessive and should be league's.

I hope these few comments are helpful. Finetooth (talk) 02:44, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

I made a few changes to the grammar and ALT text but unfortunately since I wrote the text it's difficult for me to do a good copy-edit 1. because if I made the mistake the first time I would probably make it again. 2. because I've realized that my writing is not the greatest in general. Also I'm going to try and address some of the other concerns regarding the addition of information in the lead, but that will take a little more time. Thanks--Leech44 (talk) 13:29, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

I am still researching information, but I wanted to point out that the IHHOF is separate from the HHOF. I think that one of the lines in the HHOF article is misleading where it states tat the HHOF was originally called the IHHOF, I posted something on the discussion page for the HHOF hoping to get some clarification, in case I have misinterpreted some of the articles I have read. Although they are still very similar and your concerns are still well warranted. --Leech44 (talk) 16:26, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Well it seems as i have hit a snag on this article as information has been difficult to come by. The best information comes from the IHHOF website which I was told that it's own website is not a reliable reference, and a Google scholar search turned up nothing and Google book search only offer slight previews, books containing little blurbs, or some thing along the lines of the Canadian encyclopedia (I don't remember the exact title off hand), which I'm sure I won't be able to get in the States on an inter-library loan program. The fact is that this list my never be able to achieve FL status.--Leech44 (talk) 19:32, 29 March 2010 (UTC)