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Michael Schumacher

Aiming for FA sometime soon. There are a few things which are known that are needed like eliminate recentism and others. Please review and add what you feel would be necessary to make the article FA.

Firstly Serte, please sign your PR requests using 4 tildes (~) at the end of your sentence. Suggestions for the article:

Cut down on the 2006 section to bring it in line with other years.
Cut down / remove reaction to retirement section
Add more references to the contorversies bit and make extra sure there is no POV statements in that bit. The opening of the controversies bit is particularly bad with the weasly "some say" being used multiple times.
Merge part of the trivia section into the article where possible.
Tidy up the order of the article, headings etc.

That's all I can think of for now. Alexj2002 15:12, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I totally forgot signing, it's not very usual, but happens to everyone I guess. I've cut down a bit the 2006 section but it's obviously not enough and I'll do more later. The quotes of the retirement section was removed, but their references, with links, were left there. The POV will take a while. About the trivia, I've merged one or two things, deleted others and the rest will soon disappear. Thanks for the response--Serte 18:21, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 21:59, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the work, I will try to check the suggestions and do what I can.--Serte 15:50, 24 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A little too long Doctor Bruno 00:43, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding length, we think the actual length of the text now is OK. The full table of results and the large number of cites pushes the total file size up, but that's not a readability issue. See article talk page. 4u1e 12:04, 7 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The suggestions by Alexj2002:

~~Cut down on the 2006 section to bring it in line with other years.~~
~~Cut down / remove reaction to retirement section~~
Add more references to the contorversies bit and make extra sure there is no POV statements in that bit. The opening of the controversies bit is particularly bad with the weasly "some say" being used multiple times.
~~Merge part of the trivia section into the article where possible.~~
Tidy up the order of the article, headings etc. (not sure what to do)

So, what more now? There are still some {{fact}}'s to check, but other than that, please leave your suggestions. Thanks--Serte * Talk * Contribs 00:16, 5 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Forget about the headings/ordering thing, it's fine. My only complaint would be a lack of Benetton era photos of Schumacher. However that isn't essential for either GA or FA. Alexj2002 17:27, 5 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

There are now some pictures of Schumacher-era Benettons - albeit not with Schumacher in them. This may be all that is available. 4u1e