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I have just created this page, and I'd be grateful for your candidest comments on what to do with it. It was a devil of a slog compiling it, and it has ended up longer than I foresaw. But should it be chopped up into independent articles? I'm not attracted by the idea (the nocturnes and the barcarolles might make decent stand-alone articles but would the rest?) but I'd be glad to know what other editors think. And any other comments, of course, will be welcome, on fact, form, prose and anything else. – Tim riley (talk) 18:38, 11 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: Basically what we have here is a high-quality list, but with perhaps rather more prose than is normal in a WP list. I wouldn't recommend the WP:FL route, though; if it's not a pop discography or sports-related, it probably won't get reviewed there. I think that there is sufficient prose for this to be considered like any other article; that doesn't mean that, if you wish, you can't develop in-depth articles on, say, the nocturnes or the barcarolles. But this has a value of its own, as a neat summary of Fauré's piano oeuvre, and I found it very informative. Here are a few niggles, comments and suggestions:-

  • General comment: throughout, there is a tendency to overdo the direct quotations, even for unmemorable comments such as ""the scintillating worlds of Chopin and Saint-Saëns waltzes." Maybe use paraphrase a little more
Lead
Background
Nocturnes
Barcarolles
  • it would be useful to have somewhere a precise definition of the musical term "barcarolle"
  • No. 2: Likewise, the time signatures "6/8" and "9/8" may not be widely understood and could be usefully piped to time signature.
  • No. 3: Nitpick: Four commas in te opening sentence is too many. Rather: "The third barcarolle is dedicated to Henriette Roger-Jourdain, wife of Fauré's friend, the painter Roger Jourdain. It opens..." etc
  • No. 5: What is meant by a "self-contained" section?
  • No. 10: Maybe Mme Blum should be identified, e.g. as "wife of the future French Prime Minister"? (As I recall from A level history, Blum's terms in office were on the short and sour side, but at least he got there.) Note: I had the same thought earlier about Mme d'Indy, though of course he was never PM.
    • I'll ponder this again. Mme Lalo was Edouard Lalo's daughter in law, Mme d'Indy was (I think) Vincent d'Indy's wife, and Mme Blum, as you say, was Leon's wife. I wondered whether to follow those three points up in the text, but concluded that they verged on the peripheral. Tim riley (talk) 10:51, 14 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Impromptus
Valses-caprices
Other solo piano works
For two pianos

All in all, well-researched and impressive. Brianboulton (talk) 17:59, 13 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]