Wikipedia:Peer review/Rickey Henderson/archive2
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I've listed this article for peer review because…it recently became a GA, and I would like to know how far this article is from FA. Thanks, « Milk's Favorite Cøøkie » 02:04, 29 September 2008 (UTC)
Comments from BarretBonden. Here are some brief suggestions for improvement.
- Early years; the opening sentence is too long and the reference should go after punctuation. Perhaps it could be split into two sentences.
- "He received two dozen scholarship offers to play football, but turned them down." – Why did he turn them down? Link "scholarship" and change "two dozen" to 24.
- "In each of his four minor league seasons" – link minor league.
- "going 2-for-4" – I have no idea what that means.
- A few peacock terms in the article – memorable, remarkably, famous.
- "In 1986, he led the AL in runs scored" – What is the AL?
- "homers", this is slang, use "home run"?
- Link "triples" to triples?
- Per WP:MOS, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over.
- Per MOS:NUM, single-digit whole numbers from zero to nine should be spelled out in words.
- This article contains a lot of quotes. Are they all necessary and could some of them be worked into the main body of the article?
- Don't assume that the reader knows anything about baseball or will always click on the wikilinks to find out.
- The following link does not appear to be working:
BarretBonden (talk) 16:22, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)
- You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
- http://www.baseball-almanac.com/index.shtml
- http://web.archive.org/web/20041109095208/http://baseballreport.tripod.com/The+Baseball+Report+Volume+V+Issue+1.htm
- http://www.thebaseballcube.com/index.shtml
- http://www.sportsmemorabilia.com/player/Rickey_Henderson
- http://www.baseballlibrary.com/homepage/
- http://www.thebaseballpage.com/index.php
- http://baseballanalysts.com/
- http://z.lee28.tripod.com/sbnscoverstories/index.html
- http://www.baseball-statistics.com/
- http://bleacherreport.com/
- Most of your references are given author last name first, but current ref 15 is last name last.
- http://translate.google.com/translate?hl=en&sl=es&u=http://www.terra.com/deportes/articulo/html/fox175218.htm&sa=X&oi=translate&resnum=9&ct=result&prev=/search%3Fq%3DHenderson%2B%2BNavojoa%2BMayos%2B%26hl%3Den%26client%3Dfirefox-a%26channel%3Ds%26rls%3Dorg.mozilla:en-US:official%26hs%3Dm8z%26sa%3DG gives a Google translation. Just give the original and note the language.
- Current refs 25 and 26 are just bare urls. They need to be formatted with titles and give publisher and last access dates at the very least, as well as authors if known.
- Same for currentre refs 65, 66, 84, 85, 86, 87,88, 89.
- Current ref 90 needs a page number.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
- Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 14:29, 6 October 2008 (UTC)