Wikipedia:Peer review/Taurus (constellation)/archive1
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I've listed this article about a constellation for peer review because I'd like to find out what else can be done to improve it.
Thank you, RJH (talk) 23:32, 12 June 2010 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This is interesting and I imagine it gets a lot of hits, but I think it needs some work before FAC. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
- The lead is too short for the article and does not properly summarize it per WP:LEAD. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
- Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself - however the neighboring constellations seem to only be in the lead.
- The dab finder in the toolbox finds two disambiguation links
- The order of some of the material seems like it could be made to flow more smoothly - for example, Aldebaran is introduced in the second paragraph of Notable features with two sentences, then there is a two-sentence description of the V-shape of the constellation, and the Hyades, then it returns to Aldebaraan and its position as the eye of the bull. The article explains Aldebaran's name in the fourth and last sentence of the next paragraph.
- Article seems to be well referenced, though I note some of the refs need to have abbreviations spelled out - IAU for example, or spell out Astrology in Noonan, George C. (2005). Classical Scientific Astrology. American Federation of Astr.
- There is a navbox at the bottom for constellations listed by Ptolmey, but Ptolmey does not seem to be in the article that I can see
- As far as expanding the article, I note that there seems to be no mention of Chinese or most other non-western cultures and how they view the stars in Taurus. It seems like in Chinese astronomy, most (all?) of Taurus is part of the Net, which seems like it should be included in some way (not everyone arranges these stars in Taurus)
- Assuming other cultures have different asterisms involving these stars, and that reliable sources could be found for them, could they be mentioned here too?
- Since the Pleiades are part of Taurus, some of the material in Pleiades in folklore and literature might be applicable here too.
- Not that it should be made into a Trivia-laden list, but I think some of the items listed in Taurus might be worth including here
- Perhaps some of those might have free images to add here too - like File:Taurus 3210 launching ROCSAT 2.jpg this one.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:29, 19 June 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for the feedback.—RJH (talk) 22:17, 26 June 2010 (UTC)