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Tea Peter[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I hope to make this article a good article. I worked on this and tried to expand it as much as I could. Maybe this article's "reception" section needs working on, and also maybe its prose.
Thanks, Koopatrev (talk) 02:49, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- Comment: I've not read the article, but I noticed the external links section was missing. This typically includes at least the IMDB and TV.com links. See Portal:Family Guy for other featured and good articles. --Another Believer (Talk) 20:15, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed also for You Can't Do That on Television, Peter, Leggo My Meg-O and Mr. and Mrs. Stewie Koopatrev (talk) 03:24, 29 June 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- Infobox, you have a mix of capitalised and uncapitalised "Girl" and "Silhouette".
- "twenty first" is usually hyphenated.
- "It received mixed to negative reviews from critics for its storyline and cultural references. It was viewed by 4.94 million viewers, according to Nielsen ratings" I'd say something like, "Viewed by ... , it received mixed to negative..."
- "Julius Sharpe" is mentioned in the lead as a guest actor but not in the infobox.
- You also call them guest "actor" in the infobox, and guest "star" in the lead. Be consistent.
- "finds he is unsympathetic" just "finds him" is fine.
- "The episode was..." new section, re-iterate "Tea Peter" was...
- Three short paras in the Prod/cult. refs section, expand or merge.
- "acquired a 2.4/6 rating share" I'm not sure what this means.
- "Carter Doston of TV Fanatic gave a 2.7/5 rating." neither the reviewer nor the publication have an article here, why should I care what he thinks?
- You don't need the succession box at the bottom because you have that info in the infobox.
The Rambling Man (talk) 16:21, 4 July 2012 (UTC)