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Triangle (The Beau Brummels album)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan on nominating it for GA. Before doing so, I would appreciate another set of eyes having a look. Any suggestions for improvement are welcome. Thanks, Gongshow ^Talk 20:27, 10 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This generally looks good to me. I have a few suggestions for further improvement.

Lead

"Triangle reached number 197 on the Billboard 200 albums chart and received mostly positive reviews, with critics commending Elliott as a songwriter and comparing Valentino's vocals to those of Bob Dylan." - "With" plus "-ing" is usually a bit awkward. Suggestion: "Triangle reached number 197 on the Billboard 200 albums chart and received mostly positive reviews; critics commended Elliott as a songwriter and compared Valentino's vocals to those of Bob Dylan."

Fixed. Gongshow ^Talk 05:29, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Collectors' Choice Music reissued the album in 2002." - I don't think the link to reissue is needed. It would be good to eliminate or move it for another reason as well; it forms a kind of awkward link bump with Collectors' Choice Music.

Fixed. Gongshow ^Talk 05:29, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"Titled Beau Brummels '66, the album—a collection of cover songs—was a commercial and critical disappointment due to a combination of poor sales and the decision by Warner Bros. to not release the band's original material, which had been recorded by the band in early 1966 as their previous label, Autumn Records, collapsed." - Too many clauses, perhaps? I'd try to break it up in some way, maybe two separate sentences?

Fixed. Gongshow ^Talk 05:40, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

"Triangle also features strings, brass, woodwinds, harpsichord, and numerous types of percussion." - Perhaps link the least familiar of these, harpsichord?

I agree that's it's the least familiar of these instruments. It is mentioned and linked in the previous sentence, so I just removed it from this list altogether. Gongshow ^Talk 05:44, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing

All but two of the names in this list are written last name first. Travis and Newman could be reversed with pipes inside the links; e.g., Newman, Randy.

Definitely agree that the list's format should be consistent. Fixed. Gongshow ^Talk 05:47, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The image needs alt text, meant for readers who can't see the images. WP:ALT has details.

Added. Gongshow ^Talk 06:15, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 20:15, 17 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, as always, for your suggestions. They were extremely helpful and I appreciate the time and work you put into this review. Thanks again! Gongshow ^Talk 06:17, 18 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]