Wikipedia:Peer review/Virtual Self (EP)/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to bring it to FA status.
Thanks, Skyshiftertalk 17:20, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
Dylan620
[edit]Hi Skyshifter, I'm sorry to have missed your ping on the article's talk page – I should be able to take another look at this article in the next day or two. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 18:54, 29 October 2024 (UTC)
- @Skyshifter: I have just finished re-reading the article, and I have to say I'm quite pleased. I'm seeing quite a bit of improvement over the version I reviewed at FAC a couple months ago. I do have a couple new comments:
- Robinson suffered from depression and struggled to create a follow-up. – The MOS cautions against using the word suffer because it may imply general incapacitation; might I suggest rewording this as as follows? Robinson struggled to create a follow-up; he underwent a period of writer's block that was intensified by depression.
- Virtual Self's first live performance debuted on December 8, 2017 → Robinson first performed as Virtual Self on December 8, 2017
- Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 22:35, 2 November 2024 (UTC)
Dxneo
[edit]Hello Sky, currently can't do much as I've explained on userpage, but I'll do my absolute best. In the meantime, please consider reviewing this request.
- I am aware of this archive and Dylan really outdid himself. I like to take reference from FAs like Red and/or articles undergoing FAC, so bare with me and let me know if you disagree with (some of) my suggestions.
- Question: Is Virtual Self also a record label?
- For such a long article, I'd say lead can be expanded a little.
- I think Sound would be better if it was moved to Composition since it is about the themes and sound of the record.
Virtual Self shows continued starting in August 2018, with the two-month North American "Utopia System" tour.
===> Virtual Self shows continued in August 2018, with the two-month North American Utopia System Tour.- The last paragraph on Promotion and release is a one-line paragraph which is discouraged. I think it would be better if it was merged with the former para. Thoughts?
- For Reception, I found Sputnikmusic and few other reviews, but I couldn't verify their reliability. Sputnikmusic is okay.
- I'm not really sure about the YouTube source since I can't verify the publisher's reliability, but previous reviewers approved it so I guess it's okay.
- Media files are looking good, refs are archived and linked. This a very good piece. Good job. dxneo (talk) 20:25, 7 November 2024 (UTC)