Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 September 4

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Darkleaf Entertainment[edit]

Can Someone review my article about this company... I need to know if all is correct or I must find more references about this...

Alieneks (talk) 04:18, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

I don't think the company meets the notability standards for companies and the only reference cited is from the company website. Is there any coverage in secondary sources, any interviews in magazines or newspapers? Shearonink (talk) 01:49, 7 September 2010 (UTC)


Please review this... Is about a book by me... and I don't want violate the wikipedia rules about self promotion... I'll do the article the most seriously possible

Alieneks (talk) 04:28, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

Hi Alieneks, I don't know much about books but I am an experienced editor and could offer advice. I will also make some improvements to it myself.
OK, first of all I will direct your attention to this page, Wikipedia:WikiProject Novels/ArticleTemplate, it is a guide that shows how to layout a novel-related article. I will also direct your attention to this page, Wikipedia:Notability (books), It is a way to find out if you're article is notable enough for Wikipedia or not. One more page is the manual of style for novels, Wikipedia:Manual of Style (novels).
So now on to the article:
  • The article definetely needs references
  • The 'Licence and Distribution' section is far too short
  • Im not sure about the section 'Story', I think this should be renamed 'Plot' (See Le_Père_Goriot#Plot_summary for how to write it)
  • If you wrote the book, surely you can take a picture and upload it (ask me if you need help with that)
That's about all I can see, I hope this helps. Mr.Kennedy1 talk guestbook 23:27, 4 September 2010 (UTC)[edit]

The Russell Hantz page is permanently redirecting to the Survivor: Heroes vs. Villains page. Considering he's one of the most famous Survivor contestants ever and many other Survivor and reality show contestants their own Wikipedia page, I feel he deserves one also. This article has information about both seasons he appeared on the show, his arrest, and personal life. Hopefully, there's a way you cancel the permanent redirect and let me post this article on his page.

RandJshow (talk) 08:07, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

The article basically looks good, but I think it needs some more references for specific facts. Shearonink (talk) 00:34, 7 September 2010 (UTC)[edit]

I have added a new article for Ramesh Aravind Filmograpy. I think, there has to be separate page, as the actor has acted in over 120 movies. Please review the article and remove the tags on the top.

Ashok Bhat 10:00, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

To me this article seems to basically a list. Do you have any reliable sources other than the man's own website? Maybe you can post on Wikipedia:WikiProject Actors and Filmmakers and get some specific help about writing a filmography for Mr. Aravind. Take a look at this Woody Allen filmography, it's a featured list, sometimes seeing an example of what you're trying to accomplish can help you get there.
Good luck, Shearonink (talk) 02:28, 7 September 2010 (UTC)

Razer (robot)[edit]

I have recently rewritten the vast majority of the article for Razer, a combat robot that was twice world champion on the British television series 'Robot Wars'. You might be interested to see the diff between my version as it stands now and the most up-to-date previous version. Working alongside other editors interested in this robot and series, I'm hoping that this can become the first 'Robot Wars'-related article to attain a good article stamp. It is, in my opinion, mostly well sourced for a topic whose online presence has been all but completely lost following the cancellation of the television series. There are admittedly a few small gaps in the referencing, but I am finding more and more in the archives each day.

Image-wise, I have taken a photograph of an item of merchandise produced in the image of the robot, and am in contact with one of the 'roboteers' who constructed Razer to request images for the article. (He has replied and sent me several images; they will be uploaded as soon as he confirms under which licence they should be released.) I've also messaged a Flickr user to seek permission to his photographs. If you can suggest any free illustrations or graphics which might enhance the article, I would certainly be interested to hear your ideas.

My main question is regarding the text of the article and, in particular, the section currently headed Combat history. In your opinion, is this the best way to display such information? Is it too detailed? If so, would a format more akin to Chaos 2#Battle summary be more appropriate? Perhaps something tabular? Again, any and all comments and suggestions would be richly appreciated.

Thank you very much for your time. CountdownCrispy 12:48, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

The article looks like you've put a lot of work into it, it's well-referenced, the layout is visually appealing, the prose is interesting. I'm not sure this is the proper venue about getting up to a Good Article designation. I see you've posted over at Peer Review, it seems that the articles move pretty quickly through the process over there - you'll probably get some feedback within the next several days.
And frankly, I am stunned that such a lengthy article can be written about something that, before, I would have considered to be non-notable...a mechanical robot that competed on 'Robot Wars' TV shows. Good job, Shearonink (talk) 02:45, 7 September 2010 (UTC)
Thank you very much for your positive reply! I'm particularly pleased that the prose came across as interesting - without wishing to disrespect some fellow editors, this is a subject akin to wrestling insomuch as its followers tend to be somewhat fanboi-esque, with exuberant writing styles to match! Thank you again - I really appreciate your taking the time to read the article. Best wishes, CountdownCrispy 13:31, 8 September 2010 (UTC)

United Bible Studies[edit]

I recently started the article for the experimental band United Bible Studies, and it got flagged because it might not meet the notability guidelines. It has since been improved by User:Nedraggett who expanded it and added references.

I request the help of an editor to reevaluate the article and remove the notability flag if the changes are sufficient.

Thanks for your time! - Jonah Lark (talk) 13:18, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

Hey there Jonah, my main concern with the article is that the 6 cited references are only from three sources - one citation is from a blog about a music festival(Terrastock), two citations are from the band's own listed-discography and three citations are from a single interview. I am still not sure that notability has been established. Have there been any other independent reviews or interviews? Thanks, Shearonink (talk) 00:59, 7 September 2010 (UTC)[edit]

I'd like to submit this page please advise if it looks right and how to get it out of drafts and posted on wiki. Thanks.

Lone Star Guitar (talk) 18:12, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

In my opinion this draft is not ready for Main space. Notability has not been established from enough reliable sources. Please take a look at 'your first article for some tips about creating an article from scratch. Shearonink (talk) 01:54, 7 September 2010 (UTC)

Looking for approval on the noteworthiness of this person. He has been nominated for Colorado State House Of Representatives Legislature and is on the ballot for the General Election November 2, 2010[edit]

Now that Nelson has been nominated for The Colorado State House Of Representatives Legislature, receiving 82% of the votes in the primary, and is on the ballot for the General Election November 2, 2010, does this now meet the requirements of Wikipedia notability? Thank you for your help.

Bhaktirasa (talk) 20:21, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

I'm sorry, but is there a question about a specific article? I'll be glad to try and help... Shearonink (talk) 01:00, 7 September 2010 (UTC)