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Harry Laurent[edit]

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Nominator(s): Zawed (talk)

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For your consideration at A-Class is an article covering another one of New Zealand's WWI Victoria Cross recipients; Harry Laurent. His VC was awarded for his actions during an engagement that followed the Second Battle of Bapaume. I did some expansion work in April and the article went through a GA review the same month. I look forward to reviewers' feedback and hopefully seeing this article be promoted to A-Class. Zawed (talk) 08:13, 17 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments: nice work, Zawed. I have the following comments/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 09:19, 17 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • no issues with dup links or dabs (no action required)
  • ext links all work (no action required)
  • do we know where he went to school and if he had any siblings?
  • Have added his high school, but no info on siblings. Zawed (talk) 06:36, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • do we know which battle he took part in during the Somme offensive?
  • did Laurent's unit take part in any actions between April 1917 and August 1918 when it was committed to the Hundred Days Offensive?
  • "officer training school": link Officer (armed forces)
  • "He was duly commissioned in February 1919" --> perhaps mention that the war had ended by this time and demobilisation had commenced
  • do we know what he did between 1956 and his death?
  • There isn't a lot of information on his life during this period, but did add a little amount about other VC events. Thanks for the review, much appreciated. Zawed (talk) 06:36, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per my standard disclaimer. Well done. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 18:35, 20 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Dank, Thanks for the support. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:36, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support Fifelfoo (talk) 13:51, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support on citation style Andrew research completeness. Fifelfoo (talk) 09:04, 14 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • It is my current habit to abstain or decline on reviews as my review for quality emphasises scholarly history (HQRS / historiography) and while my comments are actionable they may unintentionally exceed the criteria.
  • "McGibbon 2000, pp. 558–559." Is this a signed article? Then cite the signer. Bloggs, Jane [year] "Harry Laurent" in…
  • Not sure what you mean here. Zawed (talk) 08:45, 5 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • G'day Zawed, I believe what Fifelfoo is referring to is whether there is anything negative about Laurent in reliable sources? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:28, 14 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • exactly as Peacemaker says. It is meant as a query. And you're the best person to ask due to your source mastery. "No, I exhausted the sources researching and nothing was present," is a perfectly good answer. Similarly asking about historiography. If there's a debate amongst historians and biographers that's weighty enough to include, you would be the editor to check with. "Johns thought he did x because y but this later was dismissed by Bloggs and Thompson who analysed in terms of z." Fifelfoo (talk) 02:41, 14 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ah, OK, I understand now. There is nothing unfavourable in the literature, not that there is anything extensive out there on Laurent. This is pretty much the case for nearly all the NZ WWI VC recipients. Richard Travis (unusually, a biography was written about him) and Leslie Andrew (who had a notable WWII career) are probably the only exceptions. Zawed (talk) 08:47, 14 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • cheers. Just some points to keep in mind as you keep up your good work. I look forward to reviewing your work in future here or at FAC. Fifelfoo (talk) 09:04, 14 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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