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Hurricane Cosme (2007)[edit]

Archived discussion. Current status: {{GA-Class}}

Hurricane Cosme (2007)[edit]

Another GA of mine. It's got to be pretty close to A-class. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 23:38, 11 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All right, I seriously hadn't seen this listing even though I've commented on this page several times after it was listed... so, it gets a full review (cross off when done):
  1. "The sixth tropical cyclone, third named storm and first hurricane of the 2007 Pacific hurricane season, the hurricane originated from a tropical wave that emerged off the coast of Africa on June 27 and tracked westward before emerging in the eastern Pacific." Instead, it should be "The sixth tropical cyclone, third named storm and first hurricane of the 2007 Pacific hurricane season, Cosme originated from a tropical wave that emerged off the coast of Africa on June 27 and tracked westward before emerging in the eastern Pacific" to avoid the unnecessary double "hurricane" in the same sentence.
  2. "Cosme reached peak intensity as a Category 1 hurricane" - link to Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale#Category 1
  3. Split lede into two paragraphs
  4. Be extremely careful with {{convert}}. If you are using it for estimated wind and location measurements, you cannot use the template due to the 5-unit grid that the NHC uses. I had to argue this in Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Timeline of the 2004 Atlantic hurricane season.
  5. "The depression crossed into the Central Pacific" - is the CPHC the best link there, or should we link to Tropical cyclone basins#North Central Pacific Ocean? (Not sure, requesting discussion)
  6. "The origins of Cosme can be traced back to a tropical wave that left the coast of Africa on June 27, 2007." - either use full date linking to enable preference-based date presentation, or link to [[2007]] in the first sentence of the lede.
  7. "Due to a lack of associated convection" - link or explain, per WPTC criterion B6
  8. "It is estimated that the wave emerged into the Pacific Ocean on July 8." - {{whom}} (NHC)
  9. "However, when it separated from the ITCZ on July 13, it increased in convective organization, and was classified as Tropical Depression Six-E about midway between Mexico and Hawaii.[1]" - unclear antecedent for "it" due to the ITCZ being in the sentence
  10. "It tracked westward at 12 mph (19 km/h) under the steering currents of a deep tropical easterly flow." - {{tootechnical}}
  11. ". Although wind shear was generally light, ocean temperatures were only marginal for tropical cyclone intensification.[2][3]" - why is the first link to tropical cyclone located all the way here? Link "tropical cyclone intensification" to tropical cyclogenesis, and put a link to TC in the lede, please.
  12. "Forecasters experienced difficulty in locating the exact center of circulation." - change to "Forecasters experienced difficulty in locating the {storm's || system's || depression's} exact center of circulation."
  13. "Early on July 15 the overall cloud pattern improved,[6]" - a complicated way of saying "Early on July 15 the depression's appearance on satellite imagery improved,[6] ..."
  14. "and at 1800 UTC it was upgraded to Tropical Storm Cosme.[1]" - a good point to introduce the NHC, saying something like "and at 1800 UTC, the National Hurricane Center upgraded the depression to tropical storm status, and gave it the name "Cosme.""[1]
  15. "Shortly after attaining tropical storm status, the formerly broad circulation consolidated as banding features developed.[7]" - it should be "Shortly after attaining tropical storm status, the previously-broad circulation consolidated as banding features developed.[7]". It still would be a bit technical for my taste, but I can't think of another wording.
  16. "The inner core gradually condensed and tightened, as indicated by an AMSR-E overpass.[8]" - I don't even know what AMSR-E stands for, so the chance of a general reader knowing it is not good...
  17. "On July 16 an eye began to form and Cosme intensified to attain winds of 65 mph (105 km/h)." - you're using convert in here, so you have to cross-reference this value with a public advisory, for the same reason as #4 above.
  18. "and was upgraded to Hurricane Cosme late on July 16, about 1,600 mi (2,600 km) east of Hilo, Hawaii.[1]" - again, {{convert}}
  19. "The hurricane reached peak intensity with winds of 75 mph (121 km/h)," - definitely wrong conversion. Also, link to maximum sustained wind from "peak intensity".
  20. "...although due to cooler waters it quickly weakened to a tropical storm,[1] as the eye became ragged and cloud-filled.[10]" - I would say that the storm "weakened back to a tropical storm". Also, "cloud-filled" can be replaced with the less-awkward "filled with clouds" structure.
  21. "By July 17, the cloud pattern had deteriorated, and its winds decreased to 46 mph (74 km/h).[11]" - another {{convert}} problem
  22. "As easterly vertical wind shear increased," - should it have a hyphen here? (Not sure)
  23. "convection temporarily reformed in a concentrated area southwest of the center.[13]" - this makes the storm sound like a convict, although it is technically correct... :P
  24. ", it was downgraded to a tropical depression late on July 18 about 900 mi (1,400 km) southeast of Hilo, Hawaii;" - another conversion to verify, and I'm not sure "Hawaii" is needed here, as you already indicated that Hilo was in Hawaii in the previous paragraph.
  25. "Tracking westward at 14 mph (23 km/h), maximum sustained winds were 35 mph (56 km/h)" - if you didn't link to MSW above, link here; also, that conversion is wrong, as it assumes unknown certainty in the speed measurement.
  26. "A strong trade wind swell north of Cosme" - link to trade winds
  27. "Rain bands produced up to 6.94 in (176 mm) of rainfall,[23]" - did we ever agree whether it was "rain bands" or "rainbands"?
  28. "Because the damage from the storm was minimal," - the linked NCDC report says that damage was $50,000. It might be advisable to put that number in the article somewhere.
  29. Link to National Hurricane Center either in a) all the references' publisher fields, or b) in the first reference's (the TCR's) publisher field. Ditto with the non-NHC references: link on all publishers, or on first occurrence.
  30. Mention in the publisher field that ref. 23 was created by the Honolulu WFO.
Hope that helps, Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 22:55, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Final review[edit]

All right, guys, like I said, in order to keep this page small, we'll be periodically flushing the page by promoting/archiving pages that become inactive. At this point, we'll enter the "FARC" phase of the review, so it's time to just !!vote under the usual rules to see whether we promote the page to A-Class or not. Someone will close this review on 2008-12-31 (I can't as I commented), so please comment in support or opposition to this article's promotion to A-Class. Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 08:33, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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  1. A few improvements were done, but most of the list above hasn't been handled yet. Oppose. Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 08:33, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    I think I got most of the prose and jargon-related stuff, and I'll work on the {{convert}} templates. As for the report of $50,000 in damage, this and this don't mention a damage total. –Juliancolton Happy Holidays 14:40, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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