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This article is partly very well-written, but it sure does need cleanup. I have removed the misleadingly titled section "Decommodification" (!) along with its low-value footnote links: some are mere spam (advertising), some fail to address the claims made, some are to pure how-to pages like bus timetables and ticket sales ([[WP:NOT]] a how-to guide). Also nearly the whole "Travel" section--sorry, but how to get there and how to get around in there, and so on and so forth, just aren't fit topics for an encyclopedia article. I left a mention of the art cars. [[User:Bishonen|Bishonen]] | [[User talk:Bishonen|talk]] 13:39, 5 November 2006 (UTC). |
This article is partly very well-written, but it sure does need cleanup. I have removed the misleadingly titled section "Decommodification" (!) along with its low-value footnote links: some are mere spam (advertising), some fail to address the claims made, some are to pure how-to pages like bus timetables and ticket sales ([[WP:NOT]] a how-to guide). Also nearly the whole "Travel" section--sorry, but how to get there and how to get around in there, and so on and so forth, just aren't fit topics for an encyclopedia article. I left a mention of the art cars. [[User:Bishonen|Bishonen]] | [[User talk:Bishonen|talk]] 13:39, 5 November 2006 (UTC). |
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::Agreed. [[User:Brentt|Brentt]] 08:25, 6 November 2006 (UTC) |
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This article needs some serious work
The article comes off as an amaetuer brochure. This is a place for enyclopedic information. Most of it was clearly written by people who have been and are excited about it (which is fine, but you shouldn't be able to tell that from the contributions) One of the most obvious offenses agains encylopedic content is the "advice" sprinkled here and there. Please leave that kind of stuff out. I'm going through, and taking out the most obvious unencylopedic information, but the whole article is written in a tone that is not appropriate for a encylopedia article. I'm not even going to get into the citing problem.
I would like to see this one day become a featured article (at its current state it should have never even been considered). This isn't going to happen if people excited about the event come here and write in a way that makes it obvious its coming from a participants point of view. This isn't a place to learn what to do and what not to do on the Playa. Its a place to learn facts about burning man. It is not a place to get advice, or to initiate the uninitiated. Brentt 23:29, 13 September 2006 (UTC)
Airport travel brochure--innapropriate style
Here is an example of the kind of travel brochure-like advice that should not be in this article (the first sentence is OK).
- Black Rock City also has its own airport for small private planes, run by volunteers. Mountainous desert regions are extremely dangerous for inexperienced and experienced pilots alike, however, and it's not recommended to fly into this airport unless one is experienced with desert flying. The only advertised airfares are for shuttles offered by Advantage Flight Solutions from Reno and the Bay Area.
This is not a lonely planet guide. If there have been notable problems with the airport in the past, that may be germane to this article and please include it, but please don't write it in a travel brochure style which is warning prospective atendees of dangers. Instead cite the problems there have been in the past with the airport, or cite concerns that have been raised by published souces about the safety of the airport. Brentt 19:44, 14 September
Sourcing and Purging
I've begun the process of finding a source for every comment made in the article. If I can't find a source, I'm purging it from the page and placing it here for assistance.
I encourage others to do the same, since I'm sure I don't have the time to do it all by myself. —XSG 03:42, 15 September 2006 (UTC)
- It is well known that those are some of the few things on sale at BM. I'd be suprised if the BM website doesn't have info on that. But in this case I'm prepared not to object because the article needs so much work, and its been languishing in this poor state for so long, and it is so prone to being altered by enthusiastic burners in a lauditory or brochurish style. Maybe its good to make an exception for this article about lack of sourcing not being sufficient grounds for deletion for now. Atleast until the article improves and the cited information starts to outweigh the uncited information. There are so many published articles about BM that there is really no excuse for things not being sourced. Brentt 07:04, 15 September 2006 (UTC)
- My take is that by moving content to the Discussion page, it isn't being deleted as much as it is giving people an opportunity to find a source which makes it acceptable for inclusion in the article... And since I wrote the above paragraph, you'd think I'd have a good source for that, but no... I pulled it all out of many years of Burning Man experience... —XSG 08:56, 15 September 2006 (UTC)
- Good idea. Brentt 09:06, 15 September 2006 (UTC)
Policing and Regulations moving second paragraph out until cited
I'm moving this from the article until it can be cited:
- Recreational drug use is largely kept as a private activity and the number of roaming drug dealers has decreased dramatically since the mid-90's, although the amount of drugs actually consumed on the playa each year is still believed to be enormous. Officers refer to tickets issued for public drug use as the “Stupid Tax”. Undercover officers are known to roam the playa dressed up like attendees, even going so far as to be naked for the purpose of winning unsuspecting peoples' trust.
and please make a less weasle phrase ridden version e.g. "it is believed that"--believed by whom? The general public? Burners? You? Tell us who please. Brentt 08:41, 19 September 2006 (UTC)
Philosophising without attributing
This paragraph sounds like a bit of philosophising by the contributor (italics):
- Burning Man participants often call themselves "burners". Although this usage may vary with region, a burner is an annual denizen of Black Rock City, and anyone who embraces Burning Man as an expression in sync with their own identity is a burner. In general, the term's use is only practical in contexts outside of the event itself. A burner is usually someone who has been to the event and aspires to return, even if only in spirit. The concept also implies the sentiments and values inspired by the event itself, including a high regard for creativity, especially radical self-expression, and willingness to participate in a gift-based economy.
Its too philosophical not to be attributed to a published source. Please somebody either attribute it to someone or delete it. (if nobody finds a source I'm going to delete it.) Brentt 06:26, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
Published material on sexuality at BM
Does anyone know a good published article about sexuality at burning man? I bring this up because the reference to BMs repution for sexual promiscuity was in the Policing and Regulation section, where it doesn't really fit in because it has nothing to do with policing or regulation (aside from public sex). I moved it to the "Community" section, where it barely fits in really (along with the clothing optional bit, which also barely belongs in the community section), but I would think that a section on Sexuality would be good. But I would like some published material to reference before I creat a whole section. Brentt 07:27, 25 September 2006 (UTC)
- You could try the archives at www.pissclear.org. Electric.tapir 19:36, 8 October 2006 (UTC)
Clean-up
I am going to try and go through and give it a good edit. I am an editor and Burning Man participant. Bear with me. --Waterspyder 01:00, 5 October 2006 (UTC)
- I started to organize the article, but had to stop for a break. Hopefully this will give others a framework to work with too. I'll be back to finihsh as soon as I can --Waterspyder 02:37, 5 October 2006 (UTC)
- Thank you...it needs it. --Brentt
Info about German soldier executions sounds speculative
This kind of information needs to be sourced before being put in:
- , or else to the method of execution that ancient German armies used against captured Roman commaders ( Roman commander Marcus Aurelius Scaurus, when captured at the Battle of Arausio by the Germanic Cimbria tribe, was put in a wicker cage and then burned alive)
Just doesn't sound like typical symbolic thinking of a bay area Bohemian. It might be true, but its far out enough to need a source before being in the article.
The bit about it being related to Wicker Man should be sourced too, since Harvey has disavowed it. But I guess it can slide for now since it says it says he has disavowed it. But it should probably be made more clear that it has been disavowed by harvey in the same sentence its presented. Brentt 19:56, 6 October 2006 (UTC)
- I was questioning this bit too. When I get a few minutes, I'll shorten it up. That much detail isn't necessary in this article, even if it remains referenced. --Waterspyder 20:43, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
Quotation Punctuation
"community," "artwork," "absurdity," "decommodification," and "revelry." seems wrong to me. The change was made by someone without a login, so I can't discuss it with them directly. As such, I'm reverting the change so that it appears as community, artwork, absurdity, decommodification, and revelry. —XSG 03:31, 29 October 2006 (UTC)
(Ahem) encyclopedic cleanup
This article is partly very well-written, but it sure does need cleanup. I have removed the misleadingly titled section "Decommodification" (!) along with its low-value footnote links: some are mere spam (advertising), some fail to address the claims made, some are to pure how-to pages like bus timetables and ticket sales (WP:NOT a how-to guide). Also nearly the whole "Travel" section--sorry, but how to get there and how to get around in there, and so on and so forth, just aren't fit topics for an encyclopedia article. I left a mention of the art cars. Bishonen | talk 13:39, 5 November 2006 (UTC).
- Agreed. Brentt 08:25, 6 November 2006 (UTC)