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Index of all requests for feedback

Founding Fathers

I just viewed the article "Founding Fathers" and note it includes within its definition a bunch of nonsense. The Founding Fathers were not every Tom, Dick, and Harry who lived in the USA in 1787, when the Constitutional Convention was held. The Founding Fathers are the fifty-five men who in secret drafted the founding document upon which the government of the United States of America was and is founded. The United States of America did not exist until 1788 when it was ratified by the states. There is only one Constitution for the nation which now exists as the United States of America and the men who wrote it are the Founding Fathers of the United States of America. Please, read Webster's Dictionary for the definition of Founding Fathers, with capital Fs.

The Declaration of Independence, for example, was a declaration of independence from King George, not the founding document of the United States of America.

Gene Garman —Preceding unsigned comment added by Gene Garman (talk • contribs) 05:40, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

I agree about capitalizing the Fs, but the declaration was in fact the precursor to the establishment of a nation (on paper, the constitution). Though many people do get these documents confused, for instance Jefferson states the 'all men are created equal' in the declaration, not in the Constitution (though it should have been) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Saberhr1 (talk • contribs) 06:23, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

You should probably raise these concerns on the article's talk page. cmadler (talk) 13:19, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Definitions

This is with regards mostly to the science and mathematics related articles. If at all possible, if simpler definitions could be given for the more advanced terms, such as Planck's Constant, that would be greatly appriciated. See, I my current level of education is a High-School equivalent, but I very much enjoy studying the advanced conepts. This would help me to understand better. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.231.211.87 (talk) 05:10, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

You may wish to see if the Simple English Wikipedia has an easier article. Malinaccier (talk) 21:23, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

International Foundation for Electoral Systems

I could really use some feedback at least on the quality of this article(please assess), or what I should do to improve it. Thank you much for your help, SADADS (talk) 13:56, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Pennsylvania Renaissance Faire

We've put in a fair bit of work improving this article over the past week (compare to [1]), and are looking for suggestions for improvements. Does the article leave you with unanswered questions? In an ideal world, in which a suitable reference could be found for any fact, what else would you like to see in this article? On the other hand, do you see anything there that should be removed? Other suggestions? Also, the WikiProjects into which this article falls seem to be largely inactive, with the exception of WP:REENACT, for which I seem to be the only reviewer, so I'll ask here for opinions on how you think this article should be assessed, and what is needed to move it to the next level. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 17:37, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

RUNNERS IN SCORING POSITION

If the lead off batter hits a double but does not score in that inning because the next three batters strike out, is that scored as "zero for one" OR "zero for three" with runners in scoring position?

Bob —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bob Ebertz (talk • contribs) 19:50, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

This is the wrong forum. Try asking at the entertainment reference desk, which includes sports. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 13:42, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Mistake

On the list of best selling music artists it says Michael Jackson has sold 350 million, but that is a mistake he has in fact sold over 750 million, can you please correct this mistake. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Looshmj (talk • contribs) 11:36, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Wikipedia is the encyclopedia that anyone can edit, so be bold and make the change! Just please remember to cite a reliable source for the information. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 13:26, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gerda_Arendt

This is Gerda Arendt, new contributor from Germany and slightly overwhelmed by the amount of reading required before starting an article successfully. My intention (August 2) was to supply more information on composer and cellist Graham Waterhouse, who is on the "list of 21st century classical composers by name", than just his year of birth. I thought that once you are on a list like that you are notable ... The article was deleted before I even could mark it "hang on".

I improved the article in my user space and would like to discuss it.

Questions: Graham Waterhouse is born in England but lives in Germany, I would not know in which category to place him.

There is no general category "cellist" - redirected to "cello".

Which category would show "21st century classical composer"? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:58, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Following the suggestions at Wikipedia:Categorization of people, I would categorize him into Category:German composers (or, if possible, one of its subcategories). As far as the deletion, I'm guessing that someone felt he wasn't notable. Notability of an individual is not required for inclusion on a list. Take a look at WP:COMPOSER for the applicable notability guideline, but basically, you need to tell us why he is important. cmadler (talk) 19:29, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Dispute with biased Wikipedian

Hi, I an a new Wikipedian. Unfortunately I have a bitter dispute with another biased Wikipedian who try to manipulate facts. No matter what kind of proof I submit he changes it his way. I would like an independent review of all the facts so the article can represent the truth, Thanks.--Rm125 (talk) 04:24, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

This is the wrong forum. Start at Wikipedia:Dispute resolution. -- œ^™ 04:32, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

King Range Wilderness

I created this short article quite some time ago, and it has been sitting quietly unassessed since then. Any comments would be appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time. Sincerely, Marcia Wright (talk) 15:24, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

I think you've got a decent article going there. A few suggestions and improvement ideas:

• Try to make your wikilinks appropriately specific, for example "Roosevelt elk" rather than "Roosevelt elk" and "bald eagle" rather than "bald eagle".
• The article occaissional digresses into topic addressed elsewhere (and in some cases linked to), for example, "An estuary is broadly defined as..."
• Although the sourcing is certainly adequate, I think additional sourcing could improve the article, particularly more secondary sources. Most of the citations seem to refer to BLM publications, which I would consider primary sources in this case.
• Should the Rocks and Islands Wilderness really be part of this article, or is it really a separate area that should have its own article? If it does belong here, then more should be written about it, and a map of it (or showing its location) would be very helpful.
• The article mentions several climate peculiarities or anomalies. Why is this area like this? Or, if no one is sure, what are the leading theories? Is this being researched by anyone? If so, what are they investigating, and if not, is there a particular reason?

I hope this gives you some ideas for continued improvement to the article! In terms of assigning a specific quality assessment grade, I'd probably put it at a strong C- or a weak B-class, but please take that with a grain of salt, as this topic is far outside any expertise or even familiarity I might claim. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 16:49, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

New Page - need help populating and formatting - Ground Zero Awareness Campaign

Hi.

I can't seem to find on the internet any central location for the "Ground Zero Awareness Campaign".

I can't find anything on Wikipedia either so I registered, got my home page up and made a sub page:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Burt987/Ground_Zero_Awareness_Campaign

Does anyone know anything worth adding to the above-lined page? Can anyone add any questions to the above page?

If there is an official Ground Zero Awareness Campaign website I would love to know what it is.

Since Wikipedia has almost everything about everything - I was hoping to get as much info on the Ground Zero Awareness Campaign as possible amassed in one location - Wikipedia.

Please LMK if you can help and please feel free to add stuff to the page.

Thanks.

Burt987 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Burt987 (talk • contribs) 04:43, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

Burt987, please take a look at suggestions for writing your first Wikipedia article and also at "What Wikipedia is not". Thanks, cmadler (talk) 15:14, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/David_Tennant

This is the WORST picture I've seen of David Tennant. And, as a fan, I've seen many pictures of him, some better than others. But this one is SO bad, that it almost seems that someone purposefully sought out the worst pic available. REALLY. I'm not being overly dramatic. Please consider changing it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.207.46.40 (talk) 07:37, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

I'm not sure what you find so particularly bad about the image (and I'm not sure which image you are referring to); however, if you have a better photo to which you own the rights and are willing to release them, or if you know of a better photo which can be freely licensed, please upload it to Wikipedia and add it to the article. Keep in mind that because of Wikipedia's goal of being a free content encyclopedia, we generally cannot use copyrighted images of living people. See Wikipedia:Non-free content#Unacceptable use for more details. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 12:47, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

Veronica Papworth

I found nothing on Wikipedia about Veronica Papworth - illustrator and columnist - I have tried as a total newbie to follow instructions and set up a new page for her and for other's to add to this, but I seem to have a problem with setting this up. Could you take a look and feedback to me on where I have messed up please? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jill Pack (talk • contribs) 09:39, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

You had the entire article encompased in the <ref> </ref> tags. I've fixed that and a couple other minor things. You can see exactly what I changed here. You will probably want to add some more detail to the article, particularly to tell people why Veronica Papworth is important and worthy of an encylopedia article, otherwise your article may be deleted. Take a look at our notability standard for people, and if you need help, you might ask at WikiProject Biography, a group of editors working on the creation, development, and organization of Wikipedia's articles about people. Thanks, and welcome to Wikipedia! cmadler (talk) 12:57, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

ESRO

I have dome most of the work on this article. I would like to know what still needs to be improved and what is already acceptable. thanksU5K0 (talk) 18:29, 16 August 2009 (UTC)