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Hurricane Sergio (2018)

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Nominator(s): Noah^Talk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)

I have spent a lot of time working on correcting the accuracy of and expanding Sergio's article. Although the impact was mainly minimal, I feel this article is now complete and satisfies the FA criteria. Noah^Talk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)

Images are appropriately licensed. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:32, 17 August 2019 (UTC)

Support - This article is comprehensive and covers all of the aspects of Sergio's life in a good amount of detail. In particular, the impact is extensively covered, and I can vouch that much time was put into making the impact as comprehensive as possible. The meteorological history is accurate and the sources are well-picked. The vast majority of the problems that were present before in the article, many of which have been pointed out here by other Wikipedia users, have been fixed already. I did fix one mistake which were related to improper use of "it's"/"its". Otherwise, the grammar and spelling is sound. I believe this article is worthy of feature article status. --Oof-off (talk) 03:07, 21 August 2019 (UTC)

SC

Lead

• It's a long first paragraph and contains ten uses of "Sergio" in twelve sentences: any chance some synonyms could be used, or even just an "it" or two?
• Ditto para two – four "Sergio"s in six sentences. The same goes for the rest of the article, although to a lesser degree: there are a further sixteen in the body text, which could be trimmed here and there, particularly in the history section

Removed several mentions throughout the lead and MH. Noah^Talk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

History

• "about 18 hours as system underwent": the system?

Fixed. Noah^Talk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

That's it. Very minor, but the heavy use of the name needs to be addressed first. – SchroCat (talk) 13:31, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

• Support - all good now. - SchroCat (talk) 14:28, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

Sources

Note

I don't speak Spanish, so this refers to the English language sources only

• The sources seem reliable for the subject covered.
• Further searches showed no additional obvious sources that have been missed off.
• Spot checks on six sources verify the content claimed.
• The same spot checks showed no plagiarism or close paraphrasing.
• There are some very minor formatting issues that need sorting:
  • FN 13: "The Weather Channel. The Weather Channel." No need for the repetition – ditto on FN 28 "The Watchers. The Watchers"
  • FNs 14, 15, 24 and 25: El Universal, Diario de Yucatán El Imparcial and El Sol de Mexico are newspaper titles and so should be italicised. – check there are no others on this too. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 13:48, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

@SchroCat: That should be it. Noah^Talk 14:25, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

• Pass the SR. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 14:28, 20 August 2019 (UTC)