Talk:Mental health inequality

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 23 September 2019 and 13 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Megantsao, RHSiu, Kevinle2, Lisa.kasper3 (article contribs). Peer reviewers: NLe12.

Improvement idea

Currently, this article does a decent job of covering a lot of mental health stigma. However, I would propose adding on to the ethnic and racial disparities section of the article. There is a lot written out there about how mental health treatment and stigma can affect racial minorities from going out to seek mental health treatment, as well as how sometimes mental health professionals overlook the aspect of race as a reason for why people experience mental health issues. The section for ethnic and racial disparities is pretty short. Wuchrist (talk) 03:48, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

I also am adding a cited statement about mental health clinical spaces are difficult for POC because it's difficult to recognize when certain mental conditions or irritations that add up are due to race, and make it harder for them to get the help they need. Here is the reference source material that I referenced: Leary, Kimberlyn. “Race as an Adaptive Challenge: Working with Diversity in the Clinical Consulting Room.” Psychoanalytic Psychology 29, no. 3 (2012) Wuchrist (talk) 04:09, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

CP133 2019 Group 29 proposed edits

Introduction - needs to be re-worded to provide more clarity. I changed the first sentence to be more concrete "mental health services" but may need to be reworded or expanded if there is other information that expands beside the scope of mental health care access and service. RHSiu (talk) 14:33, 23 October 2019 (UTC)

Predictors - edit disparities to sound more neutral and less discriminatory towards those with mental health

Socioeconomic status disparities - add that income and access to health care providers are also a limiting factor in access and engagement of quality of care RHSiu (talk) 14:21, 23 October 2019 (UTC)

Disparities achieving mental healthcare - rename to "Barriers to Mental Healthcare - Subcategories: (1) Succession and (2) Quality

Spatial disparities (geographic location) - add a graph and lay out US prevalence in health care and which areas have high need --> unable to find graph - World Wide map prevalence for global impact --> unable to find graph RHSiu (talk) 05:30, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Ethnic and racial disparities - add bar graphs for easier readability --> unable to find graph RHSiu (talk) 05:30, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Suggestions on how to achieve better mental health quality - change title to Possible approaches to improving mental healthcare Megantsao (talk) 22:05, 16 October 2019 (UTC)

Disparities in success to mental health care -Rewrite this section so that it seems less opinionated and more fact based. For example, it includes sentences such as "Those who present symptoms exhibiting depression and mood swings may be mistaken as stereotypically violent." Insert the evidence behind information like this or remove it if there is no evidence and is just an opinion. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kevinle2 (talk • contribs) 23:32, 16 October 2019 (UTC)

CP133 2019 Group 28 Peer Review

• Group 29’s edits substantially improved the article by expanding the lead paragraph and adding information in the “disparities in success to mental health care” section. The lead is very concise and the article is written in lay language with a clear structure and appropriate citations. For the most part, they were able to achieve goals of improvement and there was active discussion regarding why proposed goals were changed after further research. I was also really impressed by how the introductory paragraph was written. It was neutral and summarized the article very well. I especially liked the addition of “but are not limited to” because it provides information on the topics that will be discussed in the article but certainly does not claim that these are all of the predictors. In regard to the “disparities in success to mental health care” section, I thought it was written in a more neutral tone than before but it is still a little biased. I would encourage the group to add the years where mental illness was defined as one of the highest health burdens for minority groups. It appears from the article that the claim was from 2004-2012. I also think that this section needs to have more fact-based claims instead of phrase like “may be” or “in many minority groups” or “unfairly using stereotypes”. I understand that this section is difficult to write from a neutral standpoint but making claims from published articles with evidence will hopefully strengthen the neutrality. Overall, great job!

Anjpatel (talk) 04:14, 6 November 2019 (UTC)Anjpatel 11/5/2019

• I believe that Group 29 improved the article in the following ways. They used lay language to communicate with many readers as possible. They made some paragraphs more clear to understand especially the first paragraph. They also added new paragraphs for additional information. The paragraph 'Spatial disparities (geographic location)' was clear to understand and was helpful to explain further for the subject. The edits formatted are consistent with Wiki manual style: precise, easier and intuitive, language, layout, and formatting. An article begins with an introductory paragraph and references were made in the right way. They also capitalized an organization's name, but not the others that they are not supposed to. They did not invent abbreviations or acronyms which can be ambiguous. Grammar such as punctuation, commas was correct. Font size, blank space and color were consistent with Wiki style. The group 29 achieved its overall goals for improvement. "Mmkhoshab (talk) 04:33, 7 November 2019 (UTC)(your name)"

Scriptsolv (talk) 22:26, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

• The group did a great job of improving the article by adding new content relevant to mental health inequality such as the definition of spatial disparities in lay language to the addition of financial restraints of health care services. I thought the group’s decision to expand the socioeconomic factor was a great idea due to cost being a large part of mental health inequality because the service of treatment between the upper class and lower class are completely different. I believe if the article could benefit from stats or studies in regards to the example of underserved/minority races being at a higher risk for mental health disorders. In addition, the group made the article more up-to-date by including the rising number of people affected by depressive disorders; it would be more impactful if they could state the increase of people affected. Overall, the group’s additions most definitely improved the article and achieved its overall goals for improvement. As for the sources, they were current and easily accessible to the general public. NLe12 (talk) 00:21, 7 November 2019 (UTC)

• After reading Group 29’s edits, I find that they do indeed add value to this article. They accomplish this by adding clarity to the framework of mental health services, and they did an excellent job of defining this concept. I appreciated the tone change that was used for the “predictors” section; it is easy to read. For example, expanding detail on socioeconomic factors is vital as mental health is a prominent issue in low-income families. I think, all in all, this group did a fantastic job of capturing the framework and goals for this wiki edit. I believe one minor feedback would be to add more citations and also some studies to back up the claims. I also investigated their citations, and the writing did not seem to violate copyright or plagiarized. "Mmkhoshab (talk) 04:33, 7 November 2019 (UTC) dkhoshabafard"