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The repeated use of “would” to describe what actually happened, while initially appropriate (probably), becomes labored. Instead of “would be killed”, for example, why not “was killed”? And so on through the article. Signinstranger (talk) 02:28, 18 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I have taken the possibly offensive liberty of making these changed discussed above. Please feel free to revert my changes if I have stepped on anyone’s grammatic toes. My apologies if that’s the case. Signinstranger (talk) 02:35, 18 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. The grammar feels archaic and flowery. "On lap 35, Richard Manwaring lost control of his Elva-Climax Mk I and crashed off the track. As a result of this crash, a third driver lost his life" - presumably this means that Manwaring died, but why not just say so? Why not just say "...and crashed off the track, sustaining fatal injuries"? -Ashley Pomeroy (talk) 21:13, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]