Talk:Ann Carlson

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Notability and tone[edit]

It would be helpful to have a little more information about what specifically is wrong with this article in terms of both notability of the subject and the tone of the article. It was written as part of a class assignment for a dance history class and the assignment was structured to address both of those issues. The article also contains multiple references to authoritative print sources. Thanks. Metarox (talk) 23:42, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

I stumbled across your article via WP:WPNN and I must say, if you wrote this article you did a fine job. If I may give a suggestion, on Wikipedia, references are more accepted among editors when they can be viewed online. Don't get me wrong, I'm glad you referenced books as well, it's just that most readers find it convenient to just click on a link to verify rather then running to the library.However, I am just running through it linking the appropriate pages and I will remove the notability template after I look everything over and it satisfies WP:BIO. Amor amor (talk) 09:36, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
In the "Tackling Issues" section the first three sentances sound like original research. In various places (I highlighted some witin the article) there are weasel like words and phrases (see Wikipedia:Avoid weasel words) that diminish the nuetral point of view tone. As you can see in the history, I deleted one sentence that was just down right very peacockish (see Wikipedia:Peacock) and I don't beleive it diminished the article. I think there may be other words and pharases that could also be eliminated or supported via a ciation. Pknkly (talk) 04:45, 21 April 2009 (UTC)