Talk:Episode 5569

Episode 5569 has been listed as one of the Media and drama good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: April 25, 2021. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:24, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:24, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

What is the image's purpose? (WP:NFCCP#8)
- I implemented it to illustrate two of the Black characters/actresses involved – if you don't think it's crucial to the understanding of the article then I'm fine with removing it! – DarkGlow • 14:55, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Prose seems to explain it just fine so I suggest removing it. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:16, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done – DarkGlow • 19:32, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Other than that, infobox looks good.
"everyday" → "every day"
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link racial injustices in the United Kingdom.
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"well received" → "well-received"
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Plot and cast

If there is a cast section, actor names should not be mentioned in the plot (WP:FILMPLOT also applies to television).
- Done but do you think the cast section should now come before the plot? – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No, but maybe merging both sections would work best to have consistency with other articles. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:17, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Could you point to some examples? Every soap episode article I've seen formats it like this (with actor names in the plot) so I'm not well versed in how it should look. – DarkGlow • 16:30, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Usually, in television articles I have looked at, the plot has the names of each actor in parenthesis, while omitting the use of #Cast. However, if you decide to have a cast section, it is found redundant by MOS to include the names of each actor also in #Plot. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 19:26, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done – DarkGlow • 19:32, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That being said, the plot section is under 400 words, so that passes WP:TVPLOT.
Remove the comma after "decision" as the sentence is already short.
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I noticed that serial commas were being used in the lead, so add one after "Alan, Patsy".
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Production

Remove the comma after "Blackwood in the episode" (short sentence).
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"were she reveals" → "where she reveals"
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Everything else looks great (well-sourced section).
- Thank you! – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

Remove the comma after the first use of the United Kingdom.
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"which Black people" → "that Black people"
- Done – DarkGlow • 15:03, 25 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

Sources are archived.

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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