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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 16:41, 28 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Hi, I'll review this. First thought, can we have a photo or two more of live fleas? Maybe how they look to the naked eye? Now there is only one (if the one in the taxobox is even alive), which seems too little... I also think modern photos of their eggs and larvae would be more appropriate for an article like this, which may have medical importance to readers. FunkMonk (talk) 16:41, 28 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks from me and Cwmhiraeth for taking it on. Will see what Commons has to offer... have added several. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:46, 28 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is the Diversity section separate from the taxonomy section? Seems to overlap.
Merged.
  • "They interestingly do not possess a mandible." Seems a bit out of place here. This is interesting, compared to what? No insects with a proboscis have mandibles as far as I know.
Gone.
  • Cropped images need their original author info[1], the modifier's name can be listed after the original author.
Moved data into field.

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Not sure about that. This source suggests non-hairiness is connected with improved cooling ability. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:09, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Nobody is sure of course but Desmond Morris' Naked Ape introduced rather popularly the idea that having a fixed habitaion and fleas might be important in the evolution of human hair reduction. It certainly has continued to have supporters even in recent times - see this and this.
Added a bit. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:36, 30 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Added a bit. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:39, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "Flea populations are distributed with about" Wording seems a bit odd, distributed between?
Fixed.
  • " Fecundity varies from around" Explain in parenthesis?
Glossed.
  • "fleas with hosts with limited" Double-with seems a bit repetitive?
Fixed.
  • "for phenomenal growth rates" Too hyperbolic/unencyclopaedic. Also, I' noit sure why it's supposedly phenomenal.
Fixed.
  • "Average 30–90 days." Average for what?
Removed: lifespan, but it's covered later.
  • "A flea might live a year and a half under ideal conditions. These include the right temperature, food supply, and humidity." and "With ample food supply, the adult flea will often live for up to 100 days." Seems like repetition of essentially the same info. Merge?
Fixed.
  • "as shown in the cladogram." Add date and methodology.
Done.
  • "with siphonate mouthparts" Explain.
Done.
  • "on the hemolymph" Explain.
Done.
  • I think far much too space is used on explaining why humans are hairless, you could just say something like "it has been proposed that humans became hairless to reduce their burden of fleas etc., but other theories are considered more likely" or similar. We don't really need to explain every other theory here, it is not relevant to the article scope.
Yes indeed. Done.
I added that bit because Shyamal thought it should be included. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:09, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the eczematous" Link?
Done.
  • Isn't it relevant to go a bit more in detail about the historical outbreaks of bubonic plague under Relationship with humans? This may be the most notable way fleas have ever affected humans (black plague, etc.), and it is only mentioned in passing now. I'd say it is also significant enough to be mentioned in the intro.
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:52, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'd expect there to be an explanation of the scientific name,
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:09, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • and perhaps some info on the scientific description, date author, etc.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:09, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Could there be more physical description in the intro?
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:09, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "though some are less choosy" Seems a bit too informal/anthropomorphic. Specific/particular or some such would be better.
Selective it is.
  • The photos of medical consequences seem a bit anthropocentric. Could one be replaced with one showing an affected animal? "Flea bites" Seems to be the most interchangeable one.
Chopped it, I think it wasn't adding much really. Bites on a furry animal are going to be hard to see, so let's just do without.
Thank you for the review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:16, 3 December 2016 (UTC) and from me! Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:30, 3 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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