Talk:Jen Statsky

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Peer Review

Hi JaneDoe22! I just went through your article on Jen Statsky and have some comments to offer.

First, I really liked the organization of your article! It is easy to read, and your work is well referenced making it simple to navigate through it. The categories, as well, make sense both in title and order. The categories "Filmography" and "Awards and Nominations" are simple and well organized. The sources in your "References" category are well cited though the category "Television" though lacks in sources a bit.

While the information provided are interesting, I think that the way it is phrased, however, would benefit from a more neutral and informative tone. Sentences like "In school she was already interested in writing." in your "Early Beginnings" category or "she thinks she had more chances since she gained experience as a writer" would work more in a literary biography or a magazine than a Wikipedia article as it is more related to a subjective and personal experience. It is a problem that is repeated all throughout your article and I believe your article would greatly benefit from a more formal and objective writing.

In terms of improving the writing of your article, you also seem to repeat the words "she", "and" and "that" a lot in your sentences which makes them look awkward and repetitive. I think that focusing on better constructed sentences would also help making it sound more formal.

I would also be very interested in reading more about her accomplishments rather than her experience. I think that focusing on that will also help creating an article that is more fitting for Wikipedia.

All in all, I really liked the organization and the references, but I believe that this article would really improve by focusing on a writing that is more fitting for a Wikipedia article. I liked reading about this screenwriter!

Tessadfr (talk) 22:03, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review #2

Hey JaneDoe22!

Great start on your article, it was well organized and a very smooth read. There were a couple grammatical/typos though which could use a little editing:

In the 'Early Beginnings' section you wrote: "Statsky continued he writing carrer as an intern", which should be edited to "Statsky continued *her* writing *career* as an intern" (*the stars mark the typos)

There were also a couple sentences where I found the phrasing a little awkward and could use restructuring:

"Miles who admired her work suggested Statsky to apply to a writing position that was available" --> "Miles, who admired her work, suggested Statsky apply to a writing position that was available"

Finally, the last suggestion I would have is very minor, but could add to the overall look of the page. In the infobox, under the 'Born" category, you could add her current age as well as her place of birth since you do have that information.

Other than that, the article looks great, I hope these suggestions help!

-Snowydaze — Preceding unsigned comment added by Snowydaze (talk • contribs) 01:31, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]